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teenagers are required to do community works in their free time.

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Teenagers are the strong pillars of our country. They play a pivotal role in society. Young people can spend their time, talent and money to serve nation without expecting anything return. I completely agree with the statement. To commence with, there are numerous reasons to favor this notion. First and foremost, the unpaid social work rocket their responsibility towards community. Furthermore, they can improve certain skills while communicate with variety of cultures. For example, during the” COVID-19” pandemic situation teenagers perform a phenomenal role as they helped the needy ones by giving food and medicines. As a part of this, they would be able to escalate the empathetic power on themselves. Also they were cited for the selfless effort and kindness although in the crucial stage. However, Teenage is the most vital phase in everyone life. They have to find their own time for future development. But serving the surroundings without expecting anything is awe-inspiring. As a result, it become a motivation to others and that stimulate them to do such activities. Nowadays, leisure time is robbed by social media. Some youngsters mundane that mind since it does not have any financial earning. Hence, it can be seen from the above-mentioned point that teenagers are required to do community works in their free time. To conclude that, I support those who opine that teenagers are needed to the development as it improves society too. The benefits are not only for them On the contrary also for the milieu where they live.
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Teenagers
are the strong pillars of our country. They play a pivotal role in society. Young
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people
can spend their time, talent and money to serve nation without expecting anything return. I completely
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agree
with the statement.

To commence with, there are numerous reasons to favor this notion.
First
and foremost, the unpaid social work rocket their responsibility towards community.
Furthermore
, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
certain
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skills
while communicate with variety of cultures.
For example
, during the” COVID-19” pandemic situation
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teenagers
perform a phenomenal role as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
the needy ones by giving food and medicines. As a part of this, they would be able to escalate the empathetic power on themselves.
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Also
they
were cited
for the selfless effort and kindness although in the crucial stage.

However
, Teenage is the most vital phase in everyone life. They
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have to
find their
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own
time for future development.
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But
serving the surroundings without expecting anything is awe-inspiring.
As a result
, it
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become
a motivation to others and that stimulate them to do such activities. Nowadays, leisure time
is robbed
by social media.
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Some
youngsters mundane that mind since it does not have any financial earning.
Hence
, it can be
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seen
from the above-mentioned point that
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teenagers
are required
to do community works in their free time.

To conclude
that, I support those who opine that
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teenagers
are needed
to the development as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
society too. The benefits are not
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only
for them
On the contrary
also
for the milieu where they
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live
.
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IELTS essay teenagers are required to do community works in their free time.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
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