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Taxes for the healthcare

Taxes for the healthcare 9aNm7
Over the last two hundred years, there have been many changes to society in nearly all aspects of people's lives. ACcordingly, in our modern era, every individual pays taxes for healthcare to the government, therefore I totally agree that state should take care of public's health conditions. To initiate with, there are many reasons why medical aids must be provided for every citizen whether they are poor or rich. Because, inhabitants are the first value and nation wealth, thus, quality of government's concern always will be seen on the level of its public. For example, in our country, each citizen has the right receive guaranteed medical assistance and right to secure health without paying money provided that they are civilian of Kazakhstan. Consequently, level of health high enough. On the other side of the coin, work must be paid in order to maintain budget of state. However, people need to be aware of the requirements so that they can avoid this problem with taxes. In addition, government could also help to the elder generation who especially need special attention to their health problems. This is often leads to keep level of wealth and health. To conclude, taking all things into account I strongly believe that wellness values have its own importance thus, person must be provided with well health conditions. Considering that value of safety appears to increase year after year due to the possible pandemic situations as happens now. Because, health is the crucial challenge confronting the world at the present time.
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ACcordingly
, in our modern era, every individual pays taxes for healthcare to the
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government
,
therefore
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totally
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agree
that state should take care of public's
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health
conditions.

To initiate with, there are
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many
reasons why medical aids
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must
be provided
for every citizen whether they are poor or rich.
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Because
, inhabitants are the
first
value and nation wealth,
thus
, quality of
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government
's concern
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seen
on the level of its public.
For example
, in our country, each citizen has the right receive guaranteed medical assistance and right to secure
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health
without paying money provided that they are civilian of Kazakhstan.
Consequently
, level of
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health
high
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enough
.

On the other side of the coin, work
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must
be paid
in order to maintain budget of state.
However
,
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people
need to be aware of the requirements
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that they can avoid this problem with taxes.
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government
could
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help
to the elder generation who
especially
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health
problems. This is
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often
leads to
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keep
level of wealth and health.

To conclude
, taking all things into account I
strongly
believe that wellness values have its
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own
importance
thus
, person
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must
be provided
with well
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health
conditions. Considering that value of safety appears to increase year after year due to the possible pandemic situations as happens
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now
.
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Because
,
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health
is the crucial challenge confronting the world at the present time.
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IELTS essay Taxes for the healthcare

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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