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Task1:summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they oppose the specific points made in the reading passage.Reading:Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are many re

Task1: summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they oppose the specific points made in the reading passage. Reading: Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are many re bYOgB
Both article and lecture discuss about communal online encyclopedias. The author criticizes communal online encyclopedias on three points; the encyclopedias contain inaccurate information; unscrupulous users are able to revise content in the encyclopedias; and the encyclopedias do not exclude unimportant topics from important ones. However, the professor disagrees with the criticisms of communal online encyclopedias presented in the article, and he refutes each of the author's points. First, the article implies that communal online encyclopedias are not always accurate and reliable as traditional printed encyclopedias, because the online encyclopedias are not always written by experts. The professor argues this point by saying that there is no perfectly accurate encyclopedias, and the important point is that how easy add quickly the errors can be corrected. In fact, editing mistakes information presented in online encyclopedias is easier and quicker than in traditional printed encyclopedias. Second, the article points out that anyone can revise content in the online encyclopedias, therefore, content in the online encyclopedias can be tampered by unscrupulous users or hackers. The professor refutes this point by explaining that online encyclopedias are now prevent the information by presenting some important information in a " read-only" format that cannot be revised. In addition, the online encyclopedias have some expert editors to monitor changes made to articles, and eliminated revisions that are tampered. Finally, the article states that, the online encyclopedias do not distinguish important topics from unimportant ones, so this creates a false impression. The professor opposes this point by saying that having great variety of subjects on the online encyclopedias is a big advantage. Also diversity of topics covered by the online encyclopedias is a reflection of diversity of people interests. In contrast, traditional printed encyclopedias have limited space, and the editors who choose the topics do not always consider about diversity of people interests.
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and lecture
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discuss about communal
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encyclopedias. The author criticizes communal
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online
encyclopedias on three
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points
; the encyclopedias contain inaccurate
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information
; unscrupulous users are able to revise content in the encyclopedias; and the encyclopedias do not exclude unimportant
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topics
from
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important
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ones
.
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, the
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professor
disagrees with the criticisms of communal
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online
encyclopedias presented in the
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, and he refutes each of the author's points.

First
, the
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implies that communal
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encyclopedias are not always accurate and reliable as traditional printed encyclopedias,
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because
the
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encyclopedias are not always written by experts. The
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professor
argues this
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point
by saying that there is no
perfectly
accurate encyclopedias, and the
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important
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is that how easy
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quickly
the errors can
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. In fact, editing mistakes
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presented in
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encyclopedias is easier and quicker than in traditional printed encyclopedias.

Second, the
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points
out that anyone can revise content in the
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encyclopedias,
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encyclopedias can
be tampered
by unscrupulous users or hackers. The
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professor
refutes this
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by explaining that
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online
encyclopedias are
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encyclopedias have
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expert editors to monitor
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changes
made to
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, and eliminated revisions that
are tampered
.

Finally
, the
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states that, the
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encyclopedias do not distinguish
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important
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topics
from unimportant
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,
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opposes this
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by saying that having great variety of subjects on the
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online
encyclopedias is a
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big
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Also
diversity of
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topics
covered by the
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online
encyclopedias is a reflection of diversity of
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people
interests.
In contrast
, traditional printed encyclopedias have limited space, and the editors who choose the
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topics
do not always
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consider about diversity
of
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people
interests.
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IELTS essay Task1: summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they oppose the specific points made in the reading passage. Reading: Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are many re

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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