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Task about a place near your home for improving a person’s health. What is this place? Where is this place? Who are the people that go there most? Why? How does it help people improve their health?

Task about a place near your home for improving a person’s health. What is this place? Where is this place? Who are the people that go there most? Why? How does it help people improve their health? N3b7b
This place is called VERMOSA SPORTS HUB. It is located at Imus, Cavite and is 4km from our house. There are many activities that you can do in this place such as; jogging, walking, biking, playing football, swimming and skateboarding. This place is huge. They have a 400m track oval, a field for football games, a big swimming pool if you want to take a swimming lesson and a biking trail. They also have a gym. This place will help especially for elderly. They can take a walk in the oval every morning or afternoon. That way, they can help their body in shape and boost their immune system. Before, this place was open to the public wherein they can enter in the hub for free. Me and my family went there twice. I love the place, it is clean and the area is huge. They also have a restaurant inside. It would be convenient to the people since they had everything in this place. Last November 12, it was announced that the hub will require a membership fee for those who want to go in the place. They will providing a coach that will help them to train in their everyday exercise.
This
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place
is called
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VERMOSA
SPORTS HUB. It
is located
at Imus,
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Cavite
and is
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4km
from our
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house
. There are
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many
activities that you can do in this
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place
such as; jogging, walking, biking, playing football, swimming and skateboarding. This
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place
is huge. They have a
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400m
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track
oval, a field for football games, a
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big
swimming pool if you want to take a swimming lesson and a biking trail. They
also
have a gym. This
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place
will
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help
especially
for elderly. They can take a walk in the oval every morning or afternoon. That way, they can
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help
their body in shape and boost their immune system.

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Before
, this
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place
was open to the public wherein they can
There isn't usually a preposition after "enter". Did you mean "enter the hub"?
enter in the hub
for free.
When referring to yourself and somebody else, put their name first. Also check whether the nominative form "I" is required here.
Me
and my family went there twice. I
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love
the
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place
, it is clean and the area is huge. They
also
have a restaurant inside. It would be convenient to the
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people
since they had everything in this
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place
. Last November 12, it
was announced
that the hub will require a membership fee for those who want to go in the
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place
. They will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "provide"
providing
a coach that will
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help
them to train in their everyday exercise.
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IELTS essay Task about a place near your home for improving a person’s health. What is this place? Where is this place? Who are the people that go there most? Why? How does it help people improve their health?

Essay
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2 paragraphs
203 words
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