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Task 2 writing, social and emotional skills

Task 2 writing, social and emotional skills aQgPX
It is evident from the recent statistics that violent offenses committed by adolescents have been on the raise. It is believed by many psychologists that parents and teachers are lacking in educating the children, regarding necessary social and emotional skills, thus leading to their violent behavior. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the above view before reaching a concrete decision. Firstly, raising a child is very challenging and a major role in shaping their minds is played by parents as well as teachers. Although, teaching of academics is essential, interpersonal skills have been found to be vital for a child's development. For example, children who were involved in activities like teamwork building, self awareness programs and charities in schools, were found to have positive relationships with others. Besides this, their academic performance also improved. What is the impact of mindful parenting on children? Since children spend most of their time with parents, they have an immense responsibility in guiding their child's behavior. Despite punishing a child for his mistakes, parents should focus on teaching a child how to differentiate between right and wrong. Moreover, they should be encouraged to show respect and empathy towards others. In addition, parents should try to take their kids to play dates to improve their communication and interpersonal skills. In conclusion, because of mindful teaching children will not only be successful in their studies but also will be able to practice good behavior, empathy and self-control. I strongly agree, that parents and teachers should understand the benefits of social and emotional learning and try to implement it.
It is evident from the recent statistics that violent offenses committed by adolescents have been on the raise. It
is believed
by
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many
psychologists that
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parents
and teachers are lacking in educating the
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children
, regarding necessary social and emotional
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skills
,
thus
leading to their violent behavior. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the above view
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before
reaching a concrete decision.

Firstly
, raising a child is
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very
challenging and a major role in shaping their minds
is played
by
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parents
as well
as teachers. Although, teaching of academics is essential, interpersonal
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skills
have
been found
to be vital for a child's development.
For example
,
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children
who
were involved
in activities like teamwork building, self awareness programs and charities in schools,
were found
to have
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positive
relationships with others.
Besides
this, their academic performance
also
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improved
.

What is the impact of mindful parenting on
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children
? Since
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children
spend most of their time with
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parents
, they have an immense responsibility in guiding their child's behavior. Despite punishing a child for his mistakes,
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parents
should focus on teaching a child how to differentiate between right and
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wrong
.
Moreover
, they should
be encouraged
to
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show
respect and empathy towards others.
In addition
,
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parents
should try to take their kids to play dates to
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improve
their communication and interpersonal
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skills
.

In conclusion
,
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because
of mindful teaching
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children
will not
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only
be successful in their studies
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but
also
will be able to practice
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good
behavior, empathy and self-control. I
strongly
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agree
, that
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parents
and teachers should understand the benefits of social and emotional learning and try to implement it.
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IELTS essay Task 2 writing, social and emotional skills

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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