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The Criminal From Moonlight Company And The Detective

The Criminal From Moonlight Company And The Detective DY1kj
The next day, the detective started to require the case. He found a piece of a man's shirt with a logo of a company and blood in the woman's hand. The detective found out it was a logo of Moonlight Company, suddenly he thought of "full moon night". Two weeks later, there was another full-moon night, he noticed that maybe the murdered is going to assassinate someone.     And then, he was true. That night a businesswoman was killed. But this time the criminal began very carefully, he didn't left any clues.     After all the criminal decided to kill the detective, he called him, started with a husky voice: "hello, I'm the person who has killed those people. Want to catch me? What's a fucking guy! Come to 148 Helling Street and then you can catch me! Goodbye! " the conversation only last about 39 seconds, didn't enough to find out where was the call take place.     Michael came to that address and in front ò him now was a fallowed mansion. He came inside and looked around
The
next
day, the detective
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to require the case. He found a piece of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
's shirt with a logo of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and blood in the woman's hand. The detective found out it was a logo of Moonlight
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
,
suddenly
he
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thought
of
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
full moon night
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"
. Two weeks later, there was another full-moon night, he noticed that maybe the murdered is going to assassinate someone.
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And then, he was true. That night a businesswoman
was killed
.
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But
this time the criminal began
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very
carefully
, he didn't
The verb 'didn't' requires base form of this verb: "leave"
left
any clues.
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After all
the criminal decided to kill the detective, he called him,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
with a husky voice:
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
hello, I'm the person who has killed those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. Want to catch me? What's a fucking guy!
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Come
to 148
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Helling
Street and then you can catch me! Goodbye!
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
conversation
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only
last about 39 seconds, didn't
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to find out where was the call take place.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
   
Michael came to that address and in front ò him
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
was a fallowed mansion. He came inside and looked
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
around
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IELTS essay The Criminal From Moonlight Company And The Detective

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
179 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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