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Talk about your favorite celebrity

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Today, I will give you a short talk about a famous celebrity whom I really admire. She is Emma Watson, an English actress as well as a social activist. She has a reputation for playing Hermione in Harry Porter's films. She was born in 1990 in Paris, France. After succeeding with Harry Porter, she decided to become a social activist who always raises her voice to protect women's rights and fight against gender discrimination. She is not my most favorite famous person, but it is her bravery that draws my attention. She always has straight speeches without getting anxious about any drawbacks that could happen. She is strongly aware of women's value, strength, and ability to do everything that a man could do, and she wants not only women to know this and believe in themselves, but also everyone to accept it. Emma Watson has made a great dedication to gender equality and has initiated women's movements all over the world in this decade. She could also change millions of women's thoughts about their value, to love and believe in themselves and to show their ability in every aspect of life. I really admire her mind and bravery, and I'm on my way to trying to become such a modern woman like her.
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Today
, I will give you a short talk about a
Consider using "celebrity".
famous celebrity
whom I
really
admire. She is Emma Watson, an English actress
as well
as a social activist. She has a reputation for playing Hermione in Harry Porter's films.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
She
was born
in 1990 in Paris, France. After succeeding with Harry Porter, she decided to become a social activist who always raises her voice to protect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women's
rights and fight against gender discrimination. She is not my most favorite
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famous
person,
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but
it is her bravery that draws my attention. She always has straight speeches without getting anxious about any drawbacks that could happen.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
She
is
strongly
aware of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women's
value, strength, and ability to do everything that a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
could do, and she wants not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
women to know this and believe in themselves,
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but
also
everyone to accept it. Emma Watson has made a great dedication to gender equality and has initiated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women's
movements all over the world in this decade. She could
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
millions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women's
thoughts about their value, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and believe in themselves and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their ability in every aspect of life. I
really
admire her mind and bravery, and I'm on my way to trying to become such a modern woman like her.
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IELTS essay Talk about your favorite celebrity

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
213 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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