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I’m going to talk about “Road to Mount Olympia”, one of my favorite TV shows ever. This is a program for grade 11 students. The show Road to Mount Olympia was first broadcast on March 21, 1999 on VTV3. There are 4 rounds in this show. The monthly contest is a competiton for 4 students of which 3 students win the first prize for 3 weeks in a month and one student has the second place in 3 weekly contests. Then 3 students won the first prize for 3 months and 1 students won the second palace in 3 montly contest will participate in quarter contest. Finally 4 students won the first prize in 4 quarters take part in final contest. The student with the highest score in final contest is a winner. The winner will receive 35000 USD and a schoolarship to study at a Australia university. The entire show is a sea of knowledge. This program can not only deepen and widen our knowledge but also help us develop thinking ability.
I’m going to talk about “Road to Mount Olympia”, one of my favorite TV
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ever. This is a program for grade 11
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. The
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Road to Mount Olympia was
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broadcast on March 21,
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on VTV3. There are 4 rounds in this
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. The monthly
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contest
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competiton
for 4
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of which 3
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win the
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prize for 3 weeks in a month and one
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has the second place in 3 weekly
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contests
. Then 3
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won the
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prize for 3 months and 1
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won the second palace in 3
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montly
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will participate in quarter
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Finally
4
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won the
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prize in 4 quarters
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in final
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. The
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with the highest score in final
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is a winner. The winner will receive 35000 USD and a
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to study at
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Australia university.
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entire
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is a sea of knowledge. This program can not
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deepen and widen our knowledge
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IELTS essay talk about the televesion gameshows

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
173 words
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