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In my opinion, cultural activities and sports are significant with the life of young people.

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In my opinion, cultural activities and sports are significant with the life of young people. Speding time on cultural activities brings us a lot of benefits and value experiences in life. - Many people told that music is important and necessary in life. Listening to music everyday helps people to relives stress and to take relax. - Going to the movie hepls people gain a lot of knowledge. Movie provides new ideas, helps people to be creative. When people go to the movie they’ll learn so many necessary skills such as the concentration, the patience, giving opinions, expressing individual ideas, … - This is a good opportunity in order to discover about the culture, the customs, the foods, the religion of other countries. However, sport activities also should be concentrated by young people. First of all although it brings experiences less than cultural activities, it is good for body and health. Taking part in sports activities makes people to be heathier and stronger. Second when people participate in sports activities, they will find hobbies or interests exciting for themselves. It leads to people are to be flexible. Sports activities buils the persionality of young people such as teamwork, leader, responsibilities, …
In my opinion, cultural
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are significant with the life of young
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Speding
time on cultural
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activities
brings us
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a lot of
benefits and value experiences in life.

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people
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told
that music is
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important
and necessary in life. Listening to music everyday
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helps
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people
to
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relives
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stress
and to take relax.

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Going to the movie
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hepls
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people
gain
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a lot of
knowledge. Movie provides new
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ideas
,
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helps
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people
to be creative. When
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people
go to the movie they’ll learn
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so
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many
necessary
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skills
such as the concentration, the patience, giving opinions, expressing individual
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ideas
, …

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This is a
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good
opportunity in order to discover about the culture, the customs, the foods, the religion of other countries.

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,
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sport
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activities
also
should
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by young
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people
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although it brings experiences less than cultural
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, it is
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good
for body and health. Taking part in
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sports
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activities
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makes
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people
to be
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heathier
and stronger. Second when
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people
participate in
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sports
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activities
, they will find hobbies or interests exciting for themselves. It leads to
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people
are to be flexible.
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Sports
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activities
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IELTS essay In my opinion, cultural activities and sports are significant with the life of young people.

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200 words
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