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Talk about divorce in your country

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Unfortunately, these days the rate of divorce is increasing dramatically. The predominant reasons are lack of understanding, lack of sex appeal, joblessness, addiction, infidelity, they have tiny patience I mean they are not compatible with each other and inference of other family members. Also, previously age of seven mothers is a custodian however after the child is given to his father up to the age of 18, and after that he is free. If a father is not qualified the support the child the court can decide whether to give custody to the father or not. Totally one in eight of married persons are divorced and these information is illustrate the risky points of Iran because it is leads to reducing the population

Unfortunately, these days the rate of divorce is increasing dramatically
. The predominant reasons are lack of understanding, lack of sex appeal, joblessness, addiction, infidelity, they have tiny patience I mean they are not compatible with each other and inference of other family members.

Also
, previously age of seven mothers is a custodian however
 after the child is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 to his father up to the age of 18, and after that he is free. If a father is not qualified the support the child the court can decide whether to give custody to the father or not.

Totally
 one in eight of married persons are divorced
 and Did you mean "this information" or "these informations"?this informationthese informations
these information
 is Consider using a past participle here: "illustrated".illustrated
illustrate
 the risky points of Iran This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it is leads to reducing the population

IELTS essay Talk about divorce in your country

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American English

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122 words

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