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taking part in some voluntary activities will certainly widen people's social network/circle by making new friends.

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Taking part in some voluntary activities will certainly widen people's social network by making new friends. It is true that participating in some social activities is a golden opportunity to meet humans. For instance, we can meet plenty of new friends from the ethnic minority when travelling to some remote areas, and we also have some chances to achieve a new language and know more about their culture. In that way, we will have more friends and our relationship will be wider.

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IELTS essay taking part in some voluntary activities will certainly widen people's social network/circle by making new friends.

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American English

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82 words

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