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People try to achieve balance in work and other respects of life like family in relation to that they face many problems. What are the problems they face and how can they can be overcome?

People try to achieve balance in work and other respects of life like family in relation to that they face many problems. What are the problems they face and how can they can be overcome? J3Drk
Nowadays, the lifestyle of people has become so materialistic that there is no no distinction between their personal and professional life. Maintaining a stability is not an easy task however, it is not possible as well. This essay discuss the issues and remedies to get over them. To begin with, in this increasingly expensive world, in order to fulfill the family needs people try to work more in the workplace then it ultimately leads to weak bonding with the family and inability to spend quality time with their family members. Family life gets disturbed. In order to solve this problem, strategic planning involving family members can be done to make them understand with their support then the balance can be achieved to a certain extent. Earning person can also try to take regular leave to spend time with the family. For example, in IT sector people do lots of work for long hours and have a hectic schedule. so, 70% employees take compulsory leave to reduce stress from work. Moreover, this kind of situation even affect individuals physical as well as mental health. There is increase in stress, anxiety which can make the person feel overburden special in megacities such as Mumbai and Bangalore. To handle this problem, company are workplaces to limit the working hours as well as pay well. so that you not need to work overtime and at the same time individuals can fulfill his family needs. Next, corporate should take initiative of providing bonus and give monetary support to them. For instance, big companies like ONGC and reliance offer limited working hours to this employees and reduce financial burden also. To conclude, the two-way process to maintain stability in the work and personal life. Planning and fix working hours should be handled this problem.
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people
has become
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materialistic that there is
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no
no distinction between their personal and professional life. Maintaining a stability is not an easy task
however
, it is not possible as
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well
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the issues and remedies to
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get
over them. To
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with, in this
increasingly
expensive world, in order to fulfill the
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family
needs
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people
try to
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work
more in the workplace then it
ultimately
leads to weak bonding with the
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family
and inability to spend quality time with their
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family
members.
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Family
life
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gets
disturbed. In order to solve this problem, strategic planning involving
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family
members can
be done
to
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make
them understand with their support then the balance can
be achieved
to a certain extent. Earning person can
also
try to take regular
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leave
to spend time with the
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family
.
For example
, in IT sector
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people
do lots of
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work
for long
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hours
and have a hectic schedule.
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so
, 70% employees take compulsory
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leave
to
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reduce
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stress
from
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work
.
Moreover
, this kind of situation even affect individuals physical as
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well
as mental health. There is increase in
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stress
, anxiety which can
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make
the person feel overburden special in
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megacities
such as Mumbai and Bangalore. To handle this problem,
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company
are workplaces to limit the working
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hours
as
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well
as pay
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well
.
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so
that you not need to
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work
overtime and at the same time individuals can fulfill his
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family
needs.
Next
, corporate should take initiative of providing bonus and give monetary support to them.
For instance
,
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big
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companies
like
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ONGC
and reliance offer limited working
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hours
to
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this
employees and
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reduce
financial burden
also
.
To conclude
, the two-way process to maintain stability in the
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work
and personal life. Planning and
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fix
working
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hours
should
be handled
this problem.
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IELTS essay People try to achieve balance in work and other respects of life like family in relation to that they face many problems. What are the problems they face and how can they can be overcome?

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