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t is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

t is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? Gxgj
Some people believe that technological developments lead to the loss of traditional cultures. I partly agree with this assertion; while it may be true in the case of some societies, others seem to be unaffected by technology and the modern world. On the one hand, the advances in technology that have driven industrialisation in developed countries have certainly contributed to the disappearance of traditional ways of life. For example, in pre-industrial Britain, generations of families grew up in the same small village communities. These communities had a strong sense of identity, due to their shared customs and beliefs. However, developments in transport, communications and manufacturing led to the dispersal of families and village communities as people moved to the cities in search of work. Nowadays most British villages are inhabited by commuters, many of whom do not know their closest neighbours. On the other hand, in some parts of the world traditional cultures still thrive. There are tribes in the Amazon Rainforest, for example, that have been completely untouched by the technological developments of the developed world. These tribal communities continue to hunt and gather food from the forest, and traditional skills are passed on to children by parents and elders. Other traditional cultures, such as farming communities in parts of Africa, are embracing communications technologies. Mobile phones give farmers access to information, from weather predictions to market prices, which helps them to prosper and therefore supports their culture. In conclusion, many traditional ways of life have been lost as a result of advances in technology, but other traditional communities have survived and even flourished.
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cultures
. I partly
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agree
with this assertion; while it may be true in the case of
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societies, others seem to
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technology
and the modern world. On the one hand, the advances in
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technology
that have driven
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industrialisation
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developed countries
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certainly
contributed to the disappearance of
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traditional
ways of life.
For example
, in
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pre-industrial
Britain, generations of families grew up in the same
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small
village
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communities
. These
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communities
had a strong sense of identity, due to their shared customs and beliefs.
However
, developments in transport, communications and manufacturing led to the dispersal of families and village
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communities
as
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people
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moved
to the cities in search of work. Nowadays most British villages
are inhabited
by commuters,
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many
of whom do not know their closest
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hand, in
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some
parts of the world
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cultures
still
thrive. There are tribes in the Amazon Rainforest,
for example
, that have been completely untouched by the technological developments of the developed world. These tribal
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communities
continue to hunt and gather food from the forest, and
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traditional
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skills
are passed
on to children by parents and elders.
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Other
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traditional
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cultures
, such as farming
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communities
in parts of Africa, are embracing communications
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technologies
. Mobile phones give farmers access to information, from weather predictions to market prices, which
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helps
them to prosper and
therefore
supports their
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culture
.
In conclusion
,
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traditional
ways of life have
been lost
as a result
of advances in
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technology
,
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other
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traditional
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communities
have survived and even flourished.
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IELTS essay t is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view?

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