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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. 0133

Famous sports stars have a higher salary than workers in other relevant careers. Certain populations think this is fair, while others believe it is unjustified. The wealthy of those people would be justified, because they get paid for their image as well, but many individuals think that their input to society is not so important as a doctor, for example. In my opinion, I agree that the sports professionals earn a great amount of money, due to the fact that it is absolutely difficult to become a sports celebrity. Some careers are fundamental in society such as those related to health and education, despite the fact that a number of them are not well paying jobs. For one side, medicine can help us to improve our health, and for the other side teachers can give us a great knowledge, for changing our lives. However, both areas are not as valuable as they deserve. For instance, in Chile professors only receive $1500 dollars approximately, a low remuneration for the amount of hours that they work, because they even spend time doing their work on weekends. On the other hand, there is another view that justifies the high salary in professions related to sports such as soccer or tennis players. In the elite leagues, those persons can receive a salary that is absolutely different to any human. Nevertheless, this amount is fair, because they get paid for publicity and because fans spend money on tickets or premium channels to watch them. Also, their professions are very short, and start when they are child, hence they make a big sacrifice. In conclusion, in my view, successful sports players have justified their remuneration, because they have many sources of financing. Perhaps it would be unfair that they don’t obtain that money, due to this would probably go to the entrepreneurs, and they don’t deserve this.

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