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success in life is more a matter of luck than of ability to what extend do you agree or disagree

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When someone succeeds, people often attribute that to luck. While I admit that luck may have a role to play here, I don’t know anyone who achieved success only because of luck. Therefore, I disagree with the argument that success or failure is a matter of good or bad luck. If we look around it is not hard to see that most people who achieved success in life had faced many hardships in their early life. Apple INC’s Steve Jobs, for example, was given up for adoption immediately after he was born. He faced hardships in his early life but went on to found one of the most enduring businesses in the world. Steve Jobs never attributed his success to luck. Neither did Bill Gates, the richest man in the world. They were visionaries who toiled hard to win their goals. Helen Keller, whose story continues to inspire millions of people even today, didn’t even have many faculties that we take for granted. She could neither hear nor speak but none of these disabilities prevented her from achieving what she wanted in life. There are several such examples of people who fought against all odds to achieve their goals. Many of them came from backgrounds that we consider unlucky. Still through determination, dedication and hard work they were able to achieve success, fame and money. Of course, there are a few people who achieved success because of good luck. Children born to rich and famous parents, for example, do not have to struggle to become famous or rich. We can perhaps attribute their success to luck but in reality such success does not last long. To conclude, if a person is determined to succeed nothing, not even bad luck, can prevent them from achieving what they want. Fortune, after all, favours the brave.
When someone succeeds,
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attribute that to luck. While I admit that luck may have a role to play here, I don’t know anyone
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who
achieved
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success
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because
of luck.
Therefore
, I disagree with the argument that
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or failure is a matter of
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or
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luck.

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If
we look around it is not
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hard
to
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see
that most
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people
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who
achieved
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success
in
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life
had faced
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many
hardships in their early
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life
. Apple INC’s Steve Jobs,
for example
, was
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given
up for adoption immediately after he
was born
. He faced hardships in his early
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life
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but
went on to found one of the most enduring businesses in the world. Steve Jobs never attributed his
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success
to luck. Neither did Bill Gates, the richest
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man
in the world. They were visionaries
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who
toiled
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hard
to win their goals.

Helen Keller, whose story continues to inspire millions of
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people
even
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today
, didn’t even have
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many
faculties that we take for granted. She could neither hear nor speak
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but
none of these disabilities
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prevented
her from achieving what she wanted in
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life
. There are several such examples of
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people
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who
fought against all odds to achieve their goals.
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Many
of them came from backgrounds that we consider unlucky.
Still
through determination, dedication and
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hard
work they were able to achieve
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success
, fame and money.

Of course
, there are a few
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people
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who
achieved
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success
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because
of
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good
luck. Children born to rich and
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famous
parents,
for example
, do not
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have to
struggle to become
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famous
or rich. We can perhaps attribute their
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success
to luck
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but
in reality such
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success
does not last long.

To conclude
, if a person
is determined
to succeed nothing, not even
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bad
luck, can
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them from achieving what they want. Fortune,
after all
,
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favours
the brave.
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IELTS essay success in life is more a matter of luck than of ability

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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