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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. 566VP
Education is a key aspect to get success in the modern world. It has been observed that conventional classroom study is more helpful than online study at house. If questioned, I strongly support such a notion at a major extent. My inclination is justified in the ensuing write-ups. There are several arguments to support my point of view. The first and foremost one is that study with other students in school can develope the moral values of children. In other words, classroom study can bring ethics such as unity and discipline in students. Kids who study with other children can create good bonding with them which helps in academics as well as real life. Furthermore, school-goers can make good friends in their classroom study. To illustrate, children can meet different kind of kids im schools; therefore, students can find children with same interest and make friends. For example, there is a survey which was conducted by United Nations; it revealed that 78% students remained close friends after completing their graduation. Moreover, children are in under observation of teachers in the classroom. To elaborate, during online classes, teachers are not physically present infront of school-goers; so, they can do anything in this method. However, in old fashioned style, teachers can looked at students and punish them if they misbehave. On the contrary, I could not overlooked opposite side, too. The reason is that kids can learn their syllabus from sitting at comfortable place. To reformulate, in online study, students can seat on their favourite position and study; therefore, children are more willing to study from home. For instance, 83% school-goers preferred to study from home instead of going school because of suitable study environment. In conclusion, although online study has advantage like comfortable atmosphere, I firmly believe that classroom study is more profitable because it has ability to provide not only moral values but also opportunity to make good friends.
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get
success in the modern world. It has
been observed
that conventional classroom
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study
is more helpful than
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online
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study
at
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house
. If questioned, I
strongly
support such a notion at a major extent. My inclination
is justified
in the ensuing write-ups.

There are several arguments to support my point of view. The
first
and foremost one is that
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study
with other
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students
in school can
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develope
the moral values of
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children
.
In other words
, classroom
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study
can bring ethics such as unity and discipline in
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students
. Kids who
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study
with other
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children
can create
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good
bonding with them which
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helps
in academics
as well
as real life.

Furthermore
, school-goers can
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make
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good
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friends
in their classroom
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study
. To illustrate,
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children
can
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meet
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different
kind of kids
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schools;
therefore
,
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students
can find
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children
with same interest and
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make
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friends
.
For example
, there is a survey which
was conducted
by United Nations; it revealed that 78%
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students
remained close
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friends
after completing their graduation.
Moreover
,
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children
are in under observation of teachers in the classroom. To elaborate, during
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online
classes, teachers are not
physically
present
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infront
of school-goers;
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so
, they can do anything in this method.
However
, in
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old fashioned
style, teachers can looked at
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students
and punish them if they misbehave.

On the contrary
, I could not
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overlooked
opposite side, too. The reason is that kids can learn their syllabus from sitting at comfortable place. To reformulate, in
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online
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study
,
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students
can seat on their
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position and
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;
therefore
,
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children
are more willing to
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study
from home.
For instance
, 83% school-goers preferred to
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study
from home
instead
of going school
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because
of suitable
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study
environment.

In conclusion
, although
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online
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study
has advantage like comfortable atmosphere, I
firmly
believe that classroom
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study
is more profitable
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because
it has ability to provide not
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only
moral values
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but
also
opportunity to
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make
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good
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friends
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IELTS essay Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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