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Lam Bao Tran (林宝珍) is my name. In 1998, I was born and have resided in the humble district of Ho Chi Minh City, a well-known economic center in my nation. When it comes to describing myself, 'Grit' (personality trait) is the proper term to use. This is because when I set my goal, which even has obstacles to overcome, I would spend a lot of time and effort trying to reach the target. I graduated from university with a finance-banking bachelor's degree at UEF University in 2020. Besides that, I also had an internship term at SME centers in Gia Dinh (VP Bank). However, when I learned and gained experience at this workplace, I found some negatives that didn't meet my expectations. Therefore, I recognize this job doesn't belong to me and I stepped out of my comfort zone to define myself. I had a gap year while taking time to see who I am through some extracurricular activities. Thanks to meeting new people from different backgrounds and experiences, I got to know about a data analyst job, which I immediately recognized as my area of interest. With a concentration on data analyst and business analyst jobs, I wrote this essay to express a fervent desire to apply for the **** program at *** University. "language is information and information is everything" is my favorite statement. Because I believe that learning another language would help people become another person, I have a desire to study in an international environment that facilitates good conditions for me to improve myself. It promotes not only my language ability but also my awareness and vision. The reasons why I chose Taiwan, "The Tiger of Asia", are Mandarin and a well-qualified education. This condition would provide more opportunities for me to access and absorb solid expert knowledge and wield fluency in the new language. Besides that, my take on this is that Taiwan is extremely well-known for maintaining traditional Chinese culture, and most citizens have ardent, courteous, friendly, civilized vibes that make me feel safe when I reside alone in a new country. Finally, for someone with a sweet tooth like me, Taiwan is the ideal place to indulge in countless kinds of mouth-watering boba milk tea. After inquiring about the data analyst job and business analyst job, I participated in a foundation course at BAC institutions in Vietnam and learned some courses via Data Camp about SQL. I have gradually realized that my field of interest is data analysis (computer science). In this course, I also have the occasion to build up a mock-up product, which helps me have an insight into what I should do https: //fjsshr. axshare. com/#id=1sxs4v&p=welcome Although I could continually learn to become a data analyst via some courses, I am looking for sustainable development for myself since I perceive that data could make a huge contribution to collecting web-surfing behavior and giving accurate predictions in proper business decisions or serving other domains. However, there are dark sides to big data as well, such as safeguarding free will or human rights, like the NSA’s SKYNET program, which may be killing thousands of innocent people. To be honest, Kenneth Cukier said humans were not very good at handling all the data that we could collect. Therefore, although it would cost me more time to pursue my career, I would like to study with a solid and comprehensive foundation besides specific skills. This expectation was found at *** University, which not only has a recognized academic reputation but is also a large (technical) university in Taiwan with a convenient geographical location to commute to. As far as I can see, the **university will accommodate me with a stimulating ambiance as well as a vibrant and active academic community, allowing me to broaden my horizons. Next, the ** program at *** offers me critical thinking, communication skills to build a good rapport at work, and professional comprehension knowledge. As a result, I'll be able to expand my social circle and promote my career progression in the future. Finally, *** has a good reputation in education, including in the computer science department, and has many internship opportunities. This would make me more competitive when I apply to the job market in Taiwan or my hometown while I graduate.
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林宝珍
) is my name. In 1998, I
was born
and have resided in the humble district of Ho Chi Minh City, a well-known economic center in my nation. When it
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comes
to describing myself, 'Grit' (personality trait) is the proper term to
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use
. This is
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because
when I set my goal, which even has obstacles to overcome, I would spend
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a lot of
time and effort trying to reach the target. I graduated from
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university
with a finance-banking bachelor's degree at
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UEF
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University
in 2020.
Besides
that, I
also
had an internship term at SME centers in
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Gia
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Dinh
(VP Bank).
However
, when I learned and gained experience at this workplace, I found
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some
negatives that didn't
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meet
my expectations.
Therefore
, I recognize this
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job
doesn't belong to me and I stepped out of my comfort zone to define myself. I had a gap year while taking time to
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see
who I am through
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some
extracurricular activities. Thanks to meeting new
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people
from
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different
backgrounds and experiences, I
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got
to know about a
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data
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analyst
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job
, which I immediately recognized as my area of interest. With a concentration on
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data
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analyst
and business
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analyst
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jobs
, I wrote this essay to express a fervent desire to apply for the **** program at *** University.

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language
is information and information is everything
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"
is my favorite statement.
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Because
I believe that learning another language would
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help
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people
become another person, I have a desire to study in an international environment that facilitates
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good
conditions for me to
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improve
myself. It promotes not
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only
my language ability
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but
also
my awareness and vision. The reasons why I chose Taiwan,
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"
The Tiger of Asia
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"
, are Mandarin and a well-qualified education. This condition would provide more opportunities for me to access and absorb solid expert knowledge and wield fluency in the new language.
Besides
that, my take on this is that Taiwan is
extremely
well-known for maintaining traditional Chinese culture, and most citizens have ardent, courteous, friendly, civilized vibes that
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make
me feel safe when I reside alone in a new country.
Finally
, for someone with a sweet tooth like me, Taiwan is the ideal place to indulge in countless kinds of mouth-watering
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boba
milk tea.

After inquiring about the
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data
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analyst
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job
and business
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analyst
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job
, I participated in a foundation
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course
at
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BAC
institutions in Vietnam and learned
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some
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courses
via
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Data
Camp about SQL. I have
gradually
realized that my field of interest is
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data
analysis (computer science). In this
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course
, I
also
have the occasion to build up a mock-up product, which
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helps
me have an insight into what I should do
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https
: //
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fjsshr
.
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axshare
.
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com
/#id=1sxs4v&p=welcome

Although I could
continually
learn to become a
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data
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analyst
via
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some
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courses
, I am looking for sustainable development for myself since I perceive that
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data
could
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make
a huge contribution to collecting web-surfing behavior and giving accurate predictions in proper business decisions or serving other domains.
However
, there are dark sides to
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big
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data
as well
, such as safeguarding free will or human rights, like the NSA’s
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SKYNET
program, which may be killing thousands of innocent
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people
. To be honest, Kenneth
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Cukier
said humans were not
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very
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good
at handling all the
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data
that we could collect.
Therefore
, although it would cost me more time to pursue my career, I would like to study with a solid and comprehensive foundation
besides
specific
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skills
. This expectation
was found
at ***
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University
, which not
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only
has a recognized academic reputation
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but
is
also
a large (technical)
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university
in Taiwan with a convenient geographical location to commute to. As far as I can
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see
, the
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**university
will accommodate me with a stimulating ambiance
as well
as a vibrant and active academic community, allowing me to broaden my horizons.
Next
, the ** program at *** offers me critical thinking, communication
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skills
to build a
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good
rapport at work, and professional comprehension knowledge.
As a result
, I'll be able to expand my social circle and promote my career progression in the future.
Finally
, *** has a
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good
reputation in education, including in the computer science department, and has
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many
internship opportunities. This would
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make
me more competitive when I apply to the
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job
market in Taiwan or my hometown while I graduate.
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IELTS essay study plan, statement of purpose

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
715 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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