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Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? 85xbB
The analysis shows that many young people nowadays tend to communicate online rather than seeing each other face to face. The main reason for this is that they are on their phones all the time, and the possible solution is to create more leisure activities for them. Teenagers these days are normally active on their mobile phones for hours which is very addictive and harmful to the way they socialize with the people. They spend their entire time chatting, commenting and sharing everything on social media like Facebook, Instagram, Twitters and so on. For instance, my students who are 13 to 17 years old usually use Tik Tok or Facebook everyday since they wake up in the morning. They can talk to me easily on Messenger, yet they seem to be shy and less concentrated when I meet them in real person. They sometimes find it hard to express their ideas as words because when they use all the social apps, they never talk to their friends they just type what they want to say. In my view, it can lead to a society that people in the future will not converse with each other more in the gathering, yet they will use their phones in the family. The parents can not take away the phones from them as they are already addicted to using it for socializing. It is tricky to deal with this problem, yet we still can do something to reduce the amount of time they use it. Firstly, it should start from the parents who can control their children. The mothers and fathers could limit the time that their offspring are on their cellphones. One more thing, the parents can also educate the children on how to use the phones for the benefits not harm. After that, the children should be willing to cooperate with their own parents by knowing that it would be dangerous for them to use the phones all the time. We can not reduce the time they are on the phones only by getting it but we should have time more with them like playing sports, playing games, and other activities that can improve the relationship between them and other people in the houses. To conclude, using the phones excessively can be a harmful threat to the teenager's ability to socialize, and we should make time more for them by creating any kinds of leisure activities to reduce the time that they spend on the phones.
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young
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people
nowadays tend to communicate online
rather
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other
face to face. The main reason for this is that they are on their
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phones
all the
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time
, and the possible solution is to create more leisure activities for them.

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Teenagers
these days are
normally
active on their mobile
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phones
for hours which is
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very
addictive and harmful to the way they socialize with the
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people
. They spend their entire
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time
chatting, commenting and sharing everything on social media like Facebook, Instagram, Twitters and
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so
on.
For instance
, my students who are 13 to 17 years
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usually
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use
Did you mean "TikTok" (= social networking app)?
Tik Tok
or Facebook
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everyday
since they wake up in the morning. They can talk to me
easily
on Messenger,
yet
they seem to be shy and less concentrated when I
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meet
them in real person. They
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sometimes
find it
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hard
to express their
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ideas
as words
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because
when they
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use
all the social apps, they never talk to their friends they
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just
type what they want to say. In my view, it can lead to a society that
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people
in the future will not converse with each
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other
more in the gathering,
yet
they will
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use
their
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phones
in the family. The
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parents
can not take away the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
from them as they are already addicted to using it for socializing.

It is tricky to deal with this problem,
yet
we
still
can do something to
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reduce
the amount of
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time
they
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use
it.
Firstly
, it should
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start
from the
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parents
who can control their children. The mothers and fathers could limit the
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time
that their offspring are on their cellphones. One more thing, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
can
also
educate the children on how to
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use
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
for the benefits not harm. After that, the children should be willing to cooperate with their
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own
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parents
by knowing that it would be
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dangerous
for them to
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use
the
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phones
all the
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time
. We can not
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reduce
the
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time
they are on the
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phones
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by getting it
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we should have
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time
more with them like playing sports, playing games, and
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other
activities that can
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improve
the relationship between them and
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other
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people
in the
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houses
.

To conclude
, using the
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phones
excessively
can be a harmful threat to the
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teenager
's ability to socialize, and we should
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make
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time
more for them by creating any kinds of leisure activities to
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reduce
the
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time
that they spend on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
.
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IELTS essay Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?

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