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Students with visual impairment

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In recent decades, problems facing students with visual impairment has become a controversial topic. These students face a lot of discrimination in life. They are unable to fully participate in school activities and are even left behind. This article will suggest several solutions to alleviate this problem. Firstly, in order to reduce the incidence of this, we should provide specialised materials and tools such as Braille, large print books or even talking computers. These things can make their studies easier. As a result, they can be excited when studying and will not be left behind. Secondly, we should create an atmosphere of friendliness, respect and acceptance during all activities. To do this, schools should offer more courses and lessons related to disabled students. Therefore, other students may be more mindful and recognise the inner beauty of students with visual impairment. And the gap between them can be eliminated. In conclusion, many students with visual impairments should be treated equally in social life. It is important to offer them what they need and educate non-disabled students about the ways to be friendlier and respect everyone around them.
In recent decades, problems facing
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students
with visual impairment has become a controversial topic. These
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students
face
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a lot of
discrimination in life. They are unable to
fully
participate in school activities and are even
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left
behind. This article will suggest several solutions to alleviate this problem.
Firstly
, in order to
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reduce
the incidence of this, we should provide
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specialised
materials and tools such as Braille, large print books or even talking computers. These things can
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make
their studies easier.
As a result
, they can
be excited
when studying and will not be
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left
behind.

Secondly
, we should create an atmosphere of friendliness, respect and acceptance during all activities. To do this, schools should offer more courses and lessons related to disabled
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students
.
Therefore
, other
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students
may be more mindful and
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recognise
the inner beauty of
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students
with visual impairment. And the gap between them can
be eliminated
.

In conclusion
,
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many
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students
with visual impairments should
be treated
equally
in social life. It is
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important
to offer them what they need and educate non-disabled
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students
about the ways to be friendlier and respect everyone around them.
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IELTS essay Students with visual impairment

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
186 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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