Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Students should be allowed to wear whatever they want

Students should be allowed to wear whatever they want ewmJJ
I’m afraid I can’t agree with your point. Personally I think students should be able to wear whatever they want. First and foremost, wearing casual clothes makes students feel comfortable. Because they don't feel constrained to wear uniforms that they don't like. And they are able to concentrate more on their studies and get better test results. Uniform is beautiful and meaningful but cramped. Therefore, instead of wearing uniform at all the week, students can change their style by wearing a colorful T-shirt, a short-sleeved blouse or even a plain suit. It's more pleasant for them! In addition, wearing casual clothes can give students freedom of choice and express who they are. . They have rights to choose sizes, colors and fashion, that they love. It makes students feel self - confident and makes school more colorful and lively. As you said casual clothes is expensive and uniform helps to install discipline. I think i’ve got your point, but the problem is that uniforms are not always inexpensive. Every student needs to buy more than one full complement of clothing, which can be hard for families of modest means. Furthermore, if the uniforms are forced, students will not want to wear them. For this reason at schools might quickly appear rebellion and other problems. Last but not least, having a strict uniform means they cannot wear the dress of their choice and this can make them feel like they are being oppressed. The majority of students don’t want to wear uniforms and when they feel that they are being forced to wear uniforms, they begin to resent the school and administration. So that is why, I think the students should be allowed to wear whatever they want.
I’m afraid I can’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with your point.
Personally
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
should be able to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
whatever they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
.
First
and foremost, wearing casual clothes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
comfortable.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
they don't
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
constrained to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
that they don't like. And they are able to concentrate more on their studies and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
results.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Uniform
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
and meaningful
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
cramped.
Therefore
,
instead
of wearing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
at all the week,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their style by wearing a colorful T-shirt, a short-sleeved blouse or even a plain suit. It's more pleasant for them!
In addition
, wearing casual clothes can give
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
freedom of choice and express who they are.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
They have rights to choose sizes, colors and fashion, that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
. It
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
self
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
confident and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
school more colorful and lively. As you said casual clothes is expensive and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to install discipline. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
Did you mean "I’ve"?
i’ve
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
your point,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the problem is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
are not always inexpensive. Every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
needs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
more than one full complement of clothing, which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for families of modest means.
Furthermore
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
are forced
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
them.
For this reason
at schools might
quickly
appear rebellion and other problems. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not least, having a strict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
means they cannot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
the dress of their choice and this can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
like they are
being oppressed
. The majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
don’t
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
and when they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
that they are
being forced
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
to resent the school and administration.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that is
why, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
whatever they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Students should be allowed to wear whatever they want

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
287 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Students should be allowed to wear whatever they want