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Students do not pay much attention to studies some people think that removing sports facility from high school some people think that removing sports facility from high school is the best solution to redevelop their interest in it do you agree or disagree

Students do not pay much attention to studies some people think that removing sports facility from high school some people think that removing sports facility from high school is the best solution to redevelop their interest in it 8gyYw
In the contemporary era there is a heated argument over the issue that sports is replacing education from students life due to this factor people think detaching sports from high school is best solution to regain their interest in studies. A lion's share of society favours it however the rest go averse it. I partially agree with the above statement. The following would highlight my personal perspective along with an apt example. I donot see eye to eye with the central idea for various reasons. First and foremost, sports play a pivotal role in everybody's life. Therefore, it comes as a savior in the period of stress and strain. Secondly, it makes person active, agile and physically fit. As a result, more opportunities in field of civil services, defence and many more have been given to competitors. Adding further, sports help us with certain traits like brotherhood, team spirit, harmony, cooperation and unity in diversity. To substainte, there is an epitome of famous letterperson like MS. Dhoni, Virat Kohli, Cristiano Ronaldo who are the role model for many individuals. All of them are qualified from high school. On the logger's head, some critics go against the above discussed assertions. When students fail to take their lecture academic record of such students are disastrous. Moreover, not every soul get success in the field of sports. Furthermore, high school is the time when students can have vast vareity of knowledge. Hammering the last nail, I am of the opinion that changes in education system must be made so that students can maintain balance of both academic as well as curriculum activities
In the contemporary era there is a heated argument over the issue that
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sports
is replacing education from
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students
life due to this factor
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people
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think
detaching
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sports
from high school
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is best
solution to regain their interest in studies. A lion's share of society
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favours
it
however
the rest go averse it. I
partially
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agree
with the above statement. The following would highlight my personal perspective along with an apt example. I
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donot
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see
eye to eye with the central
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idea
for various reasons.
First
and foremost,
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sports
play a pivotal role in everybody's life.
Therefore
, it
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comes
as a savior in the period of
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stress
and strain.
Secondly
, it
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makes
person active, agile and
physically
fit.
As a result
, more opportunities in field of civil services,
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defence
and
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many
more have been
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given
to competitors. Adding
further
,
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sports
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help
us with certain traits like brotherhood, team spirit, harmony, cooperation and unity in diversity. To
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substainte
, there is an epitome of
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famous
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letterperson
like MS.
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Dhoni
,
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Virat
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Kohli
, Cristiano Ronaldo who are the role model for
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many
individuals. All of them
are qualified
from high school. On the logger's head,
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some
critics go against the above discussed assertions.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
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students
fail to take their lecture academic record of such
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students
are disastrous.
Moreover
, not every soul
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get
success in the field of
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sports
.
Furthermore
, high school is the time when
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students
can have vast
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vareity
of knowledge. Hammering the last nail, I am of the opinion that
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changes
in education system
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must
be made
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so
that
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students
can maintain balance of both academic
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as well as
curriculum
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activities
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IELTS essay Students do not pay much attention to studies some people think that removing sports facility from high school some people think that removing sports facility from high school is the best solution to redevelop their interest in it

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
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