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Describe about Importance of physical activities in primary education. Do you agree or disagree that sports has enormous benifits on health and wellbeing of child.

Describe about Importance of physical activities in primary education. that sports has enormous benifits on health and wellbeing of child. pJM80
I do agree, that sports has great impact on students health and wellbeing. Sport is one of the top activities which bring great results for people of any age. First, it helps to improve health significantly, including blood circulation and overall physical stamina. Second, it helps to make your body more flexible and responsive. Moreover, sports help to improve brain activity as well, making it the best way to avoid numerous possible aging illnesses. Since sport is a competition, it also brings numerous possibilities and allows improving ability to build proper tactics and strategies. Thus, you can develop your organizational and decision-making skills by going in for sports. Sports and games teach you how to think and respond quickly in order to succeed in your competition. Sport develops physical, social, and organizational skills improving people’s abilities to become a part of a team and always heading to the main goal. All these skills are beneficial in personal and professional life and must always be obtained.
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sports
has great impact on students health and
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wellbeing
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Sport
is one of the top activities which bring great results for
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people
of any age.
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, it
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helps
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improve
health
significantly
, including blood circulation and
overall
physical stamina. Second, it
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helps
to
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make
your body more flexible and responsive.
Moreover
,
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sports
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help
to
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improve
brain activity
as well
, making it the best way to avoid numerous possible aging illnesses.

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sport
is a competition, it
also
brings numerous possibilities and
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allows
improving ability to build proper tactics and strategies.
Thus
, you can develop your organizational and decision-making
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skills
by going in for
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sports
.
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Sports
and games teach you how to
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think
and respond
quickly
in order to succeed in your competition.

Sport develops physical, social, and organizational
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skills
improving
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people
’s abilities to become a part of a team and always heading to the main goal. All these
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skills
are beneficial in personal and professional life and
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must
always
be obtained
.
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IELTS essay Describe about Importance of physical activities in primary education. that sports has enormous benifits on health and wellbeing of child.

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