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story about rogue children

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Joe and Helen have two small children, they always resist going to bed, and Helen cant handle this burden, and insomnia is killing her and she frequently complaining to joe, and he says you always hard on yourself, you should be taken easy when I’m not there. I know what to do, it’s a piece of cake for me. As he is tied up with his job during the week, he decides follow up on this obstacle at the weekend. Saturday night, he drops by his children at their bed room, and he starts singing for them, you know, he condider himself a good singer but is not. Howover, he decided that, if he sang to the childer when they want to bed, it would a magic bullet for chikdren sleeping and help them to relax and graduaaly they would asleep. When children hear his voice they whisper toghetr, that a surefire way to stop him is pretending asleep.
Joe and Helen have two
small
children, they always resist going to bed, and Helen
cant
handle this burden, and insomnia is killing
her and
she
frequently
complaining to
joe
, and he says you always
hard
on yourself, you should
be taken
easy when I’m not there. I know what to do, it’s a piece of cake for me. As he
is tied
up with his job during the week, he decides follow up on this obstacle
at the weekend
.

Saturday night, he drops by his children at their
bed room
, and he
starts
singing for them, you know, he
condider
himself a
good
singer
but
is not.
Howover
, he decided that, if he sang to the
childer
when they want to bed, it would a magic bullet for
chikdren
sleeping and
help
them to relax and
graduaaly
they would asleep. When children hear his voice they whisper
toghetr
, that a surefire way to
stop
him is pretending asleep.
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IELTS essay story about rogue children

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
159 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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