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Story about freshman of Cambridge University

Story about freshman of Cambridge University BgjYp
Passing all the demanding and challenging examinations with flying colors, I finally have become a freshman of Cambridge University - a well-known university in England. I spent more than 10 years completing my childhood dream. Never did I think I could forget this unforgettable memory in my entire life. Tracing back to the time when I was a primary student, I used to tell my nearest and dearest that in the foreseen future, I would study abroad in England. Indeed, I formed my big dream when I was 7 years old. At that time, my father was just a worker from a small company in a village. My mom, however, left me when I was only 3 years old. I just saw my mother through the picture taken by my father when she was a high school student. Although my family had a difficult living condition, I always did my best to achieve a scholarship as much as possible to support my family’s finances. Life went on, I took a senior high school entrance examination to my favorite high school - Le Hong Phong high school for the gifted. Luckily, I had become a valedictorian this year, I should have had a shift from my village to Ho Chi Minh City for studying. Unfortunately, my father’s company was out of business, he became jobless, which means my family’s finances have become more and more difficult than ever. Because of the economic loss, I could hardly become a Le Hong Phong’s students, and my dream was closed. My father did many various jobs for a living, from a farmer to a waiter to guarantee that my studying is still stable. Knowing my living conditions, I decided to study in a normal school in my village. One day, there was a university tour that came to my village and introduced me to studying abroad scholarship. Holding a paper application, I immediately reminisced about my childhood dream - becoming an oversea student. I read carefully every detailed requirement, only by achieving 100% scholarship can I have the opportunity to study in my dream university. With continuity efforts, I passed the exam with flying colours and became the first Vietnamese student to gain a perfect score and passed Cambridge University. Although there were many challenging things to adapt to a new environment in the foreign country. I still keep the fire of passion in studying. Up to the present, my family's economy has been better and my father has found a stable job to make a living. Thanks to my strong will, I have gone through my hardest time in my life. I believe that those who always do their best, never stop studying will deserve a good thing back. Indeed, life is not a bed of roses, the more challenging situations you overcome, the more successful you
Passing all the demanding and challenging examinations with flying colors, I
finally
have

become a freshman of Cambridge
University
-
a well-known
university
in England. I spent

more than 10 years completing my childhood dream. Never did I
think
I could forget this

unforgettable memory in my entire life.

Tracing back to the time when I was a primary
student
, I
used
to
tell
my nearest and dearest

that in the foreseen future, I would study abroad in England.
Indeed
, I formed my
big
dream

when I was 7 years
old
. At that time, my
father
was
just
a worker from a
small
company
in a

village. My mom,
however
,
left
me when I was
only
3 years
old
. I
just
saw
my mother through

the picture taken by my
father
when she was a
high
school
student
. Although my family had a

difficult living condition, I always did my best to achieve a scholarship as much as possible to

support my family’s finances. Life went on, I took a senior
high
school
entrance examination

to my favorite
high
school
-
Le Hong
Phong
high
school
for the gifted. Luckily, I had become

a valedictorian this
year
, I should have had a shift from my village to Ho Chi Minh City for

studying. Unfortunately, my
father’s
company
was out of business, he became jobless, which

means my family’s finances have become more and more difficult than ever.
Because
of the

economic loss, I could hardly become a Le Hong
Phong
’s
students
, and my dream
was closed
.

My
father
did
many
various jobs for a living, from a farmer to a waiter to guarantee that my

studying is
still
stable. Knowing my living conditions, I decided to study in a normal
school
in

my village. One day, there was a
university
tour that came to my village and introduced me to

studying abroad scholarship. Holding a paper application, I immediately reminisced about

my childhood dream
-
becoming an oversea
student
. I read
carefully
every detailed

requirement,
only
by achieving 100% scholarship can I have the opportunity to study in my

dream
university
. With continuity efforts, I passed the exam with flying
colours
and became

the
first
Vietnamese
student
to gain a perfect score and passed Cambridge University.

Although
there were
many
challenging things to adapt to a new environment in the foreign

country. I
still
keep
the fire of passion in studying. Up to the present, my family's economy has

been better and my
father
has found a stable job to
make
a living.

Thanks to my strong will, I have gone through my hardest time in my life. I believe that those

who always do their best, never
stop
studying will deserve a
good
thing back.
Indeed
, life is

not a bed of roses, the more challenging situations you overcome, the more successful you
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IELTS essay Story about freshman of Cambridge University

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
473 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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