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Steel rods manufacturing

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The given picture shows the process by which steel rods are produced in the furniture business. The overall process consist of eleven stages starting from collection of raw material to inspection of the steel rods produced. First of all raw materials such as iron ore, yellow ore and carbon are collected. Secondly this raw materials is passed through the melting slit where it is melted at a temperature ranging from 1300 degree celsius to 1500 degree celsius. After that it is passed through smelting cabin for refinement. Following this it is passed through pouring machine in which condescend metal is passed into ingots. This ingots are attached into a cooling tank in which temperature is from 60 to 100 degree celsius. Then this metal is passed through the noozle and subsequently the strans of cooled metal is moved through the rollers. After that it is heated by the heating machines and advances to the surface check where the automation measuring is happening. In the subsequent stage it is chopped into pieces by a cutter. After this id is stamped in it and finally the produced steel rods is moved into the inspection stage.

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 the process by which steel rods are produced
 in the furniture business. The overall
 process consist of eleven stages starting from collection of raw material to inspection of the steel rods produced.

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. Secondly
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passed
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through
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passed
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through
 smelting cabin for refinement. Following this it is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrungivemovereachcrossleave
passed
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through
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. Then this metal is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrungivemovereachcrossleave
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moved
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through
 the rollers. After that it is heated
 by the heating machines and advances to the surface This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 where the automation measuring is happening. In the subsequent stage it is chopped
 into pieces by a cutter. After this id is stamped
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moved
 into the inspection stage. 