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Computers have shaped the world that we see today. The invention of computers marked the beginning of a technological era that has transformed civilization for the better and has become an integral part of our daily lives. Computer innovations have made it simpler to develop effective solutions to problems which seemed impossible, making life easier, more efficient, and bringing dreams closer to reality. I was always captivated by computers as a kid and was fascinated by the changes brought by the advancements in computer. Given that my own life essentially coincided with the rise of the modern computer industry, I can feel that huge strides await us in this area. I decided to study computer science during my undergraduate studies in order to learn more about the subject in depth, and I would like to pursue a master's degree in computer science to further my knowledge in this expanding field. My will to learn and academic aptitude have combined to make me a high-achieving student, with a 9. 6 CGPA in 10th grade. I chose computer science for my 12th grade since I was really interested in the topic and received a 94 percent. I originally learned the fundamentals of numerous programming languages, such as C++ and SQL, in high school. I began to look forward to computer lessons more than any other topic from that point forward. How a few lines of code can create a stunning website, as well as how simple data administration can be with SQL, piqued my curiosity. I earned my bachelor's degree in computer science in order to expand my computer skills and pursue a career in the field. I was introduced to a variety of topics, including Object Oriented Languages, Data Structures, Algorithm Design and Analysis, and Database Management Principles, all of which piqued my interest. These topics were incredibly interesting, and they are utilized all the time to make our lives simpler. For example, since the introduction of SQL, database maintenance has become a fairly simple operation. I interned at Fertilizers and Chemicals Travancore Limited (FACT) during my second year of undergraduate studies, where I learnt about Enterprise Resource Management, networking, and SAP software, which helped me grasp how computers are used in the industrial sector. My desire to learn more about computers grew as a result of this. Aside from language study, I worked on projects such as student attendance tracking system, which allows a student to check their attendance percentage for each course. The identification of emotions by micro-expression analysis was one of the key projects I worked on. With this project I learned more about machine learning and building neural networks for analysis. In addition, I also submitted a conference paper titled "Micro-Expression Recognition Using Time Distributed Convolutional and Recurrent Neural Network" to the First International Conference on Recent Trends in Artificial Intelligence, which was held on on June 29, 2021. Following graduation, I worked as an associate at Guidehouse, a prominent global provider of consulting services to the public and private sectors with broad capabilities in management, technology, and risk management. This position allowed me to get valuable experience adjusting to various programming languages and systems, as well as gain knowledge of the computer business. It also demonstrated to me that each new technical progress and creation paves the way for even bigger future advances. With the information I will gain during my master's degree, I wish to continue contributing to this field. In addition to the courses that I have taken, I have been very active outside of the classroom, participating in extracurricular activities and pursuing new experiences so as to push myself and broaden my horizons. I have also participated in cultural and athletic events, helping inculcate in me the various organizational skills. Active participation in various sports and extra-curricular activities brought out liveliness in my busy life. Canada's educational system is well-known around the world. With a wide range of work options and a diverse population, it is the ideal country for a high quality of life. While exploring numerous Master's program in Canada, I came across Carleton University's master's in computer science. Carleton is a university that encourages hands-on research, practical experience, and extensive study. The research project and coop semester will allow me to apply what I've learned in my master's program in real-world scenarios. Strategically located in Ottawa, the nation's capital, it is a hub for numerous high-tech enterprises, providing a diverse range of job possibilities. At Carleton, I'll be able to study with some of the best classmates and scholarly professors. Carleton's expertise will aid me in achieving my goal of being a software engineer. My ultimate objective is to build a noteworthy and helpful career in this industry while also contributing to society. A focused study of Computer Science would allow me to obtain a lot of experience while also expanding my understanding of the topic In long-term, I aim to apply what I learn in Carleton University to the computing sector in my own country. Although this industry is fast expanding and showing tremendous promise, it is still in its infancy in comparison to other, more sophisticated countries. I hope to gain the skills, perspective, and experience necessary to lead our industry into a new age by enrolling in your master's program. Being a student of the Carleton University will serve as a motivator for me to pursue my career goals. I am well aware of the level of commitment, endurance, and resolution required to complete my graduate studies. If given the chance, I am confident that I would perform to the best of my ability and attempt to develop skills that would assist me in achieving my objectives and contributing to research efforts. It would be a wonderful joy and honor to attend your university and study there. I hope to be able to pursue a master's degree in computer science at your institution.
Computers have shaped the world that we
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see
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. The invention of computers marked the beginning of a technological era that has transformed civilization for the better and has become an integral part of our daily
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lives
. Computer innovations have made it simpler to develop effective solutions to problems which seemed impossible, making life easier, more efficient, and bringing dreams closer to reality.

I was always captivated by computers as a kid and
was fascinated
by the
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changes
brought by the advancements in computer.
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Given
that my
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own
life
essentially
coincided with the rise of the modern computer
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industry
, I can feel that huge strides await us in this area. I decided to
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study
computer
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science
during my undergraduate
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studies
in order to
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learn
more about the subject in depth, and I would like to
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pursue
a
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master's
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degree
in computer
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science
to
further
my knowledge in this expanding field.

My will to
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learn
and academic aptitude have combined to
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make
me a high-achieving
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student
, with a 9. 6 CGPA in 10th grade. I chose computer
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science
for my 12th grade since I was
really
interested in the
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topic
and received a 94 percent. I
originally
learned the fundamentals of numerous programming
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languages
, such as C++ and SQL, in high school.
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I
began to look forward to computer lessons more than any other
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topic
from that point forward. How a few lines of code can create a stunning website,
as well
as how simple data administration can be with SQL, piqued my curiosity.

I earned my bachelor's
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degree
in computer
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science
in order to expand my computer
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skills
and
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pursue
a career in the field. I
was introduced
to a variety of
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topics
, including
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Object Oriented
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Languages
, Data Structures, Algorithm Design and Analysis, and Database
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Management
Principles, all of which piqued my interest. These
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topics
were
incredibly
interesting, and they
are utilized
all the time to
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make
our
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lives
simpler.
For example
, since the introduction of SQL, database maintenance has become a
fairly
simple operation.

I interned at Fertilizers and Chemicals
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Travancore
Limited (FACT) during my second year of undergraduate
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studies
, where I
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learnt
about Enterprise Resource
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Management
, networking, and SAP software, which
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helped
me grasp how computers are
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used
in the industrial sector. My desire to
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learn
more about computers grew
as a result
of this.

Aside from
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language
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study
, I worked on
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projects
such as
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student
attendance tracking system, which
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allows
a
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student
to
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check
their attendance percentage for each course. The identification of emotions by micro-expression analysis was one of the key
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projects
I worked on. With this
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project
I learned more about machine learning and building neural networks for analysis.
In addition
, I
also
submitted a conference paper titled
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"
Micro-Expression Recognition Using Time Distributed Convolutional and Recurrent Neural Network
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"
to the
First
International Conference on Recent Trends in Artificial Intelligence, which
was held
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on on
June 29, 2021.

Following graduation, I worked as an associate at
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Guidehouse
, a prominent global provider of consulting services to the public and private sectors with broad capabilities in
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management
, technology, and
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risk
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management
. This position
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allowed
me to
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get
valuable
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experience
adjusting to various programming
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languages
and systems,
as well
as gain knowledge of the computer business. It
also
demonstrated to me that each new technical progress and creation paves the way for even bigger future advances. With the information I will gain during my
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master's
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degree
, I wish to continue contributing to this field.

In addition
to the courses that I have taken, I have been
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very
active
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outside of
the classroom, participating in extracurricular activities and pursuing new
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experiences
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so as to
push myself and broaden my horizons. I have
also
participated in cultural and athletic
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events
, helping inculcate in me the various organizational
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skills
. Active participation in various sports and extra-curricular activities brought out liveliness in my busy life.

Canada's educational system is well-known around the world. With a wide range of work options and a diverse population, it is the ideal country for a high quality of life. While exploring numerous
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Master's
program in Canada, I came across Carleton University's
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master's
in computer science.

Carleton is a
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university
that encourages hands-on research, practical
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experience
, and extensive
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study
. The research
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project
and coop semester will
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allow
me to apply what I've learned in my
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master's
program in real-world scenarios.
Strategically
located in Ottawa, the nation's capital, it is a hub for numerous high-tech enterprises, providing a diverse range of job possibilities. At Carleton, I'll be able to
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study
with
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some
of the best classmates and
scholarly
professors. Carleton's expertise will aid me in achieving my goal of being a software engineer.

My ultimate objective is to build a noteworthy and helpful career in this
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industry
while
also
contributing to society. A focused
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study
of Computer
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Science
would
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allow
me to obtain
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a lot of
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experience
while
also
expanding my understanding of the
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topic
In long-term, I aim to apply what I
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learn
in Carleton
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University
to the computing sector in my
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own
country. Although this
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industry
is
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fast
expanding and showing tremendous promise, it is
still
in its infancy
in comparison
to other, more sophisticated countries. I hope to gain the
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skills
, perspective, and
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experience
necessary to lead our
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industry
into a new age by enrolling in your
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master's
program.

Being a
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student
of the Carleton
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University
will serve as a motivator for me to
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pursue
my career goals. I am well aware of the level of commitment, endurance, and resolution required to complete my graduate
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studies
. If
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given
the chance, I am confident that I would perform to the best of my ability and attempt to develop
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skills
that would assist me in achieving my objectives and contributing to research efforts. It would be a wonderful joy and honor to attend your
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university
and
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study
there. I hope to be able to
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pursue
a
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master's
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degree
in computer
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science
at your institution.
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IELTS essay statement of purpose for studying in carleton university canada

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12 paragraphs
986 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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