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State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons. Using specific details in your explanation. Students should not be allowed to bring cell phones (mobile phones) into classroom. v.1

State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons. Using specific details in your explanation. Students should not be allowed to bring cell phones (mobile phones) into classroom. v. 1
Parents throughout the world spend time reading with their offspring to prepare them for school where their literacy skills are further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and the benefits of it will be covered in this essay. A fundamental reason for this is that there is no biological age for reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are reluctant readers, possibly because of being forced to read, and this turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly. In addition, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a child’s imagination must be acknowledged. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive skills, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context rather than learning it from a book. Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally, and gain self-confidence. There is no scientific research which suggests reading at a young age is essential for a child’s development, moreover, evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years’ education focuses on playing. Reading is only encouraged if a child shows an interest in developing this skill. This self-directed approach certainly does not result in Finnish school leavers falling behind their foreign counterparts. In fact, Finland was ranked the sixth best in the world in terms of reading. Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I am not vehemently opposed to it and I strongly recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a child’s daily routine. However, reading as a regular day time activity should be swapped for something which allows a child to develop other skills.
Parents throughout the world spend time
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reading
with their offspring to prepare them for school where their literacy
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skills
are
further
developed;
however
, recent research suggests that focusing on
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reading
at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and the benefits of it will
be covered
in this essay.

A fundamental reason for this is that there is no biological age for
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reading
, and pushing infants to acquire this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
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before
they are ready could have repercussions.
For example
, in the UK,
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many
boys are reluctant readers,
possibly
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because
of
being forced
to read, and this turned them off
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reading
. By focusing on other activities and developing other
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skills
such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they
usually
acquire this
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skill
rapidly
.
In addition
, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a
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child’s
imagination
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be acknowledged
. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive
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skills
,
for example
, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context
rather
than learning it from a book.
Furthermore
, play
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
youngsters to mature
emotionally
, and gain self-confidence.

There is no scientific research which suggests
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reading
at a young age is essential for a
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child’s
development,
moreover
, evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years’ education focuses on playing.
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Reading
is
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only
encouraged if a
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child
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
an interest in developing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
. This self-directed approach
certainly
does not result in Finnish
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school leavers
falling behind their foreign counterparts. In fact, Finland
was ranked
the sixth best in the world in terms of reading.

Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I am not
vehemently
opposed to it and I
strongly
recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child’s
daily routine.
However
,
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reading
as a regular day time activity should
be swapped
for something which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
to develop other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons. Using specific details in your explanation. Students should not be allowed to bring cell phones (mobile phones) into classroom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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