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Sports at school distract students

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It is argued that doing sports distracts students from more important things. Do students really need to do sports? How does it actually affect studies and what could be done to get rid of them? Doing sports at school promote physical health during the most important time of youth. Moreover, sports are not only for wellness, but also it helps the strength of our hearts and souls. Nowadays, sports are good for students in dealing with stress in the classes, at home or among their peers. When we are depressed, exercises can also help to improve mood. By that, our brain enhance sense of well-being and take off negative thoughts. Moreover, exercise is also a good way to strengthen social life with the people of the same interest. Being physically strong and active is important because it can benefit our lives in many different ways. In schools, many students, especially students of high schools, often deny to participate in extracurricular activities saying that doing them is pointless saying that the stresses of performing well physically and academically can be a burden for them. In addition, high school students may be busier as they have to take exams and prepare for university admission. However, sport has impact not only in academic performance, but also can affect psychologically. For example, it can produce unhealthy level of depression and stress in a child, who is pushed to do so, and feels a failure with every loss. In the future, these athletes can become harmful, and they will do anything to win. In conclusion, school administration should consider the capabilities of each student and then make decisions.
It
is argued
that doing
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sports
distracts
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students
from more
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important
things. Do
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students
really
need to do
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sports
? How does it actually affect studies and what could
be done
to
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get
rid of them?

Doing
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sports
at
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school
promote physical health during the most
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important
time of youth.
Moreover
,
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sports
are not
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only
for wellness,
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but
also
it
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helps
the strength of our hearts and souls. Nowadays,
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sports
are
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good
for
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students
in dealing with
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stress
in the classes, at home or among their peers. When we
are depressed
, exercises can
also
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help
to
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improve
mood. By that, our brain enhance sense of well-being and take off
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negative
thoughts.
Moreover
, exercise is
also
a
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good
way to strengthen social life with the
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people
of the same interest. Being
physically
strong and active is
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important
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because
it can benefit our
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lives
in
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many
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different
ways.

In
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schools
,
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many
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students
,
especially
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students
of high
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schools
,
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often
The verb 'deny' is used with the gerund form: "deny participating".
deny to participate
in extracurricular activities saying that doing them is pointless saying that the
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stresses
of performing well
physically
and
academically
can be a burden for them.
In addition
, high
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school
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students
may be busier as they
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have to
take exams and prepare for university admission.
However
,
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sport
has impact not
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only
in academic performance,
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but
also
can affect
psychologically
.
For example
, it can produce unhealthy level of depression and
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stress
in a child, who
is pushed
to do
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so
, and feels a failure with every loss. In the future, these athletes can become harmful, and they will do anything to win.

In conclusion
,
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school
administration should consider the capabilities of each
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student
and then
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make
decisions.
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IELTS essay Sports at school distract students

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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