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Spending on places related to free time activities is not sufficient , government should spend more money on these places . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Spending on places related to free time activities is not sufficient, government should spend more money on these places. NmaDq
It is suggested that higher authorities should alloted huge funds on places where people can enjoy lesiure activities. I completely agree with this view as it is beneficial for the population as well as for country. To begin with, there are certain aspects due to adminstration ought to spend more on these places. First and the foremost, it creats harmonious society. In other words, undoubtedly when people utilize their time on that places then they can interact to common people and can make strong relationships with them. For example, parks provide this opportunity to all people from different generations to doing yoga and other recreational activities with other individuals which proves beneficial for the society. Moreover, these places plays an important roal to decrase physical desease. To make it more clear, as nowdays people followed inactive lifestyle becsuse they are too dependent on technology therefore places such as fitness center and laughter clubs proves fruitful because people can enjoy physical activities which reduces the ailments like obesity, blood pressure, heart attack etcetra. Apart from it, peolpe can get rid of from their hectic busy scedual. To be specific, as pepole visit that places to enjoy themselves, enjoy rhe view of nature hence it beats their stress not only this but they also can concentration properly on their work after enjoying lesuire activites thus these places has lot of merits for human beings. In conclusion, government should definitly spend money on free time activity places due to the fact that these places make sure the well being of society and individuals.
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is suggested
that higher authorities should
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alloted
huge funds on
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places
where
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people
can
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enjoy
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lesiure
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activities
. I completely
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agree
with this view as it is beneficial for the population
as well
as for country.

To
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begin
with, there are certain aspects due to
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adminstration
ought to spend more on these
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places
.
First
and the foremost, it
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creats
harmonious society.
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,
undoubtedly
when
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people
utilize their time on that
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places
then they can interact to common
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people
and can
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make
strong relationships with them.
For example
, parks provide this opportunity to all
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people
from
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different
generations to doing yoga and other recreational
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activities
with other individuals which proves beneficial for the society.

Moreover
, these
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places
plays an
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important
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to
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decrase
physical
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desease
. To
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make
it more
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clear
, as
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nowdays
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people
followed inactive lifestyle
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becsuse
they are too dependent on technology
therefore
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places
such as fitness center and laughter clubs proves fruitful
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because
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people
can
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enjoy
physical
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activities
which
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reduces
the ailments like obesity, blood pressure, heart attack
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etcetra
. Apart from it,
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peolpe
can
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get
rid of from their hectic busy
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scedual
. To be specific, as
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pepole
visit that
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places
to
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enjoy
themselves,
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enjoy
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rhe
view of nature
hence
it beats their
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stress
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only
this
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but
they
also
can concentration
properly
on their work after enjoying
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lesuire
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activites
thus
these
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places
has lot of merits for human beings.

In conclusion
,
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government
should
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definitly
spend money on free time
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activity
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places
due to the fact that these
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places
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make
sure the
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well being
of society and individuals.
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IELTS essay Spending on places related to free time activities is not sufficient, government should spend more money on these places.

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