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Space exploration is good for other technologies, but others say it is better to spend money on other things. Discuss both sides, and give your own opinion.

Space exploration is good for other technologies, but others say it is better to spend money on other things. 56wGD
Some people believe that universe inspection directly influences the technological developments of other aspects. However, others do not agree with this statement, and they argue that there more urgent needs to be spent on the planet. Although exploring the solar system may bring us technological progress, I believe that the taxpayer's money has to spend on preventing environmental damage. First and foremost, many technologies which people have been using these days we have gained from universe technologies, and it will be continued in order to obtain more technological success in our social life. In other words, cash which was spent on galaxy research assists to invent most technological reforms that have been practising in the health care organization, navigation system, mass media, and other spheres that are vital in everyday life. To illustrate, the development of cosmos technologies has given us magnetic resonance imaging, MRI, which can be used to help diagnose or monitor treatment for a variety of diseases and this technology saves the lives of millions of individuals every year. These technologies had not occurred if governments would not have spent a lot of funds on universe study. Therefore, spending billions of US dollars to explore space may be beneficial in many aspects of life. On the other hand, from the other point of view, our globe is in a danger because of global warming. I mean that these days the temperature of the planet has been rising 3 Calcium degrees every year because of air pollution, deforestation, ocean pollution. I believe that dollars in which spending on the solar system should be redirected in order to tackle environmental problems. For instance, if governments spend taxpayer's funds to create technologies that can absorb carbon dioxide from the air which is the main cause of global warming, we will protect our globe. If authorities did not spend a lot of cash on new technologies that clean air from pollutants, we would lose the climate battle in the near future. In conclusion, despite authorities spend a significant amount of currency on the development of universal technologies arguing that it is beneficial for other improvements, I believe that funds must be spent to solve global warming immediately as it is better to save our mother globe instead of exploring a new one.
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that universe inspection
directly
influences the
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technological
developments of
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other
aspects.
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, others do not
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agree
with this statement, and they argue that there more urgent needs to be
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spent
on the planet. Although exploring the solar system may bring us
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technological
progress, I
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believe
that the taxpayer's money
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has to
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spend
on preventing environmental damage.

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and foremost,
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technologies
which
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people
have been using these days we have gained from universe
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technologies
, and it will
be continued
in order to obtain more
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technological
success in our social life. In
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other
words, cash which was
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spent
on galaxy research assists to invent most
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technological
reforms that have been
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practising
in the health care organization, navigation system, mass media, and
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other
spheres that are vital in everyday life. To illustrate, the development of cosmos
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technologies
has
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given
us magnetic resonance imaging, MRI, which can be
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used
to
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help
diagnose or monitor treatment for a variety of diseases and this
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technology
saves the
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lives
of millions of individuals every year. These
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technologies
had not occurred if
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governments
would not have
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spent
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a lot of
funds on universe study.
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, spending billions of US dollars to explore space may be beneficial in
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many
aspects of life.

On the
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other
hand, from the
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other
point of view, our globe is in a
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danger
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because
of global warming. I mean that these days the temperature of the planet has been rising 3 Calcium degrees every year
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because
of air pollution, deforestation, ocean pollution. I
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believe
that dollars in which spending on the solar system should
be redirected
in order to tackle environmental problems.
For instance
, if
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governments
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spend
taxpayer's funds to create
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technologies
that can absorb carbon dioxide from the air which is the main cause of global warming, we will protect our globe. If authorities did not
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spend
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a lot of
cash on new
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technologies
that clean air from pollutants, we would lose the climate battle in the near future.

In conclusion
, despite authorities
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spend
a significant amount of currency on the development of universal
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technologies
arguing that it is beneficial for
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other
improvements, I
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believe
that funds
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must
be
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spent
to solve global warming immediately as it is better to save our mother globe
instead
of exploring a new one.
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IELTS essay Space exploration is good for other technologies, but others say it is better to spend money on other things.

Essay
  American English
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381 words
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