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Somepeople say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Somepeople say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 2
Today, people have various opinions about the efficiency of the pedagogical system, and this is a debateful question that whether practical skills should be prioritized instead of learning facts or not. I cannot agree or disagree with this topic, and my idea falls nearly halfway between. On the one hand, some people consider facts as an integral step in the educational system, which gives students the opportunity to achieve a clear understanding of various subjects. learning facts, students can use them practically. For instance, students cannot produce and test chemical substances in the laboratory unless they have enough knowledge about chemical reactions, materials character, and so forth. As a result, although teaching facts can be time-consuming, it is well worth the effort. In addition, the educational system should assess their goals and structure at each level based on different cornerstones, including students’ skills, ages, and ability constraints. For example, primary students are not mature physically and mentally enough to do projects which university students can handle. For these reasons why this group thinks it is vital that schools spend time on teaching facts. On the other hand, masses of people believe that the educational system had better invest more in practical skills. From an educational point of view, these skills lunch students on a path of creation and innovation. Besides that, practical skills help bodies to comprehend their talents and foster them in order that they can achieve better occupations in the future. In contrast, not only are facts not useful in real life, but also they cannot be kept in students’ minds permanently, and it is only a kind of time and energy-wasting. For example, most of the lessons children have learned at schools like geography and math formulas have no practical uses in future life. In conclusion, from my point of view, the role of facts and practical skills is complimentary, and they make a profound contribution to students learning the process.
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have various opinions about the efficiency of the pedagogical
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debateful
question that whether
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practical
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skills
should
be prioritized
instead
of learning facts or not. I cannot
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agree
or disagree with this topic, and my
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falls
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halfway between.

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some
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people
consider facts as an integral step in the
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educational
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system
, which gives
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students
the opportunity to achieve a
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clear
understanding of various subjects.
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learning
facts,
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students
can
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use
them
practically
.
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,
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students
cannot produce and
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test
chemical substances in the laboratory unless they have
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enough
knowledge about chemical reactions, materials character, and
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so
forth.
As a result
, although teaching facts can be time-consuming, it is well worth the effort.
In addition
, the
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educational
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system
should assess their goals and structure at each level based on
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different
cornerstones, including
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students’
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skills
, ages, and ability constraints.
For example
, primary
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students
are not mature
physically
and mentally
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enough
to do projects which university
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students
can handle. For these reasons why this group
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thinks
it is vital that schools spend time on teaching facts.

On the other hand
, masses of
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people
believe that the
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educational
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system
had better invest more in
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practical
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skills
. From an
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educational
point of view, these
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skills
lunch
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students
on a path of creation and innovation.
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that,
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practical
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skills
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help
bodies to comprehend their talents and foster them in order that they can achieve better occupations in the future.
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, not
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are facts not useful in real life,
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also
they cannot be
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kept
in
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students’
minds
permanently
, and it is
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a kind of time and energy-wasting.
For example
, most of the lessons children have learned at schools like geography and math formulas have no
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practical
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uses
in future life.

In conclusion
, from my point of view, the role of facts and
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practical
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skills
is complimentary, and they
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make
a profound contribution to
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students
learning the process.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Somepeople say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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