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Someone famous or someone with a special talent

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Jeon Jungkook from BTS is a brilliant idol. First, he is a good singer. For example, on his appearance on King Of Masked Singer, he received much praise by the panel of judges in regards to his voice. They felt that his voice had a mysterious sound to it that made the listener feel emotions from past memories. Second, he is a good boy and always respects everyone. To illustrate, he helped staffs to collect some trash after the ISAC ( Idol Star Athletics Championships ) have finished. Even you are old or young, Jungkook is always kind and politeness to you. Finally, he can do everything he want and do it pretty well. For instance, if he wants to shoot a video, he will do it. With some things he do not know how to do it then he will study about it. After several times, he can do it very well in the next time. He can sing, rap, cook, clean, . . etc…. In conclusion, as one can see from these reasons, Jeon Jungkook is an invincible person.
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Jeon
Jungkook from BTS is a brilliant idol.
First
, he is a
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good
singer.
For example
, on his appearance on King Of Masked Singer, he received much praise by the panel of judges
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
his voice. They felt that his voice had a mysterious sound to it that made the listener feel emotions from
Consider using "memories".
past memories
. Second, he is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
boy and always respects everyone. To illustrate, he
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helped
staffs to collect
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some
trash after the
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ISAC
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(
Idol Star Athletics Championships
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)
have finished. Even you are
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old
or young, Jungkook is always kind and politeness to you.
Finally
, he can do everything he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wants", "wanted".
want
and do it pretty well.
For instance
, if he wants to shoot a video, he will do it. With
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
things he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "does", "did".
do
not know how to do it then he will study about it. After several times, he can do it
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very
well in the
next
time. He can sing, rap, cook, clean
Did you just mean "," or "."?
, .
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.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
etc
….
In conclusion
, as one can
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see
from these reasons,
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Jeon
Jungkook is an invincible person.

IELTS essay Someone famous or someone with a special talent

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
181 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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