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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it's a bad idea and it could be dangerous. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it's a bad idea and it could be dangerous. v. 1
It is a common belief among scientist humans are not alone in the universe as an evolving intelligent organism, and also connection with them is possible. However, another belief is so harmful for the people. I will discuss these viewpoints supporting by other life forms as like a human - being may be existed, and we should be in researching for sending messages. To begin, other planets can host their life forms which can think, talk, speak in a language. To connect with them gets some positive effects. Therefore, we can explore some high technology and some cure for deathfull diseases. The living form can be adapted hard life situation, such as less oxygen, water, extreme cold. If we can success to reach them, we would learn some information which we had had never ever. For example, some researches prove that there is water on Red Planet. Thus, they estimate life can be existed in there. In my opinion, it can be helpful if we can learn how to maintain to live in this circumstances. On the other hand, even if there has been existed other intelligent organism, sending messages would be the reason of detrimental influences. That is to say, these living forms can be shape-shifter, so they can play act our family, colleagues, even also the government workers. In the other words, our world can be changed by them in a refuting circle. However, all these words just like a nightmare. Some estimates which explained by the scientist it has been never appearing, or impossible to harmful connection with other planets, including Mars. In conclusion, some authorities believe that intelligence not only in human-being, also other life forms has knowledge and high technology. It is so far from our digital age, however, in my opinion, we have not been created in this incredible universe, we have already shared with them in a good way. In the future, like as unbordering world, the universe would be explored with their residents.
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also
connection with them is possible.
However
, another belief is
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. I will discuss these viewpoints supporting by
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being may
be existed
, and we should be in researching for sending messages.

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planets can host their
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forms
which can
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think
, talk, speak in a language. To connect with them
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some
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positive
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, we can explore
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high technology and
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cure for
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deathfull
diseases. The living
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form
can
be adapted
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hard
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life
situation, such as less oxygen, water, extreme
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cold
. If we
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can success
to reach them, we would learn
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some
information which we had had never ever.

For example
,
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some
researches prove that there is water on Red Planet.
Thus
, they estimate
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life
can
be existed
in there. In my opinion, it can be helpful if we can learn how to maintain to
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live
in
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circumstances.

On the
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other
hand, even if there has
been existed
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other
intelligent organism, sending messages would be the reason of detrimental influences.
That is
to say, these living
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forms
can be shape-shifter,
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so
they can play act our family, colleagues, even
also
the
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government
workers. In the
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other
words, our world can be
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changed
by them in a refuting circle.
However
, all these words
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just
like a nightmare.
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estimates which
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explained
by the scientist it has
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been never appearing
, or impossible to harmful connection with
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other
planets, including Mars.

In conclusion
,
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some
authorities believe that intelligence not
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only
in human-being,
also
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other
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life
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forms
has knowledge and high technology. It is
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so
far from our digital age,
however
, in my opinion, we have not
been created
in this incredible universe, we have already shared with them in a
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good
way. In the future, like as
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unbordering
world, the universe would
be explored
with their residents.
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IELTS essay Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it's a bad idea and it could be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
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331 words
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