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Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion?

Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion? DlPLW
It is rightly said that education is the third eye of man. Thus, children should receive high-quality education along with specialised subjects for a bright future. It is often debated that some special subjects should be taught after teenage while others believe that these should be taught since the start of schooling. In my opinion, it depends on the complexity of courses and interest of pupils when they want to start learning them. This essay will illustrate both the views in details. To commence with, teaching particular subjects after the age of 15 has various advantages. First of all, after reaching a particular age, students can understand them in more depth. Likewise, sometimes a lot of vocabulary used in these lessons is very easy to understand for children after teenage. Moreover, extra courses can add burden to young minds and they can lose interest in education altogether. In addition, sometimes these lessons require to use some kind of equipment while learning. Very young children can easily mishandle that equipment and it can lead to accidents. For instance, subjects related to reproduction can be taught after a particular age, as students of that age can properly understand the concepts. On the other hand, there are a number of benefits of studying these subjects throughout school. Firstly, this trend lends a helping hand to children in learning and understanding the subjects since childhood. Secondly, this method also helps them to choose subjects for their higher studies. Furthermore, developing some extra skills earlier in life is easier rather than after reaching a certain age. These subjects can be taught at a small scale to young children and complexity can be increased as they are promoted to higher grades. For Example, teaching computer basics and coding from an early age helps pupils to excel this skill easily. In a nutshell, it is apt to conclude that, although, teaching some special subjects after a certain age is easy or children to understand. However, if they are taught through whole school life, children can achieve expertise in those skills early.
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after teenage while others believe that these should
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start
of schooling. In my opinion, it depends on
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complexity
of courses and interest of pupils when they want to
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start
learning them. This essay will illustrate both the views in
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details
.

To commence with, teaching particular
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subjects
after the
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age
of 15 has various advantages.
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First of all
, after reaching a particular
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age
, students can
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understand
them in more depth.
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sometimes
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vocabulary
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used
in these lessons is
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very
easy to
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understand
for
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children
after teenage.
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minds and
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kind of equipment while learning.
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can
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mishandle that equipment and it can lead to accidents.
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related to reproduction can
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after a particular
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age
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can
properly
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understand
the concepts.

On the other hand
, there are a number of benefits of studying these
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subjects
throughout school.
Firstly
, this trend lends a helping hand to
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children
in learning and understanding the
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subjects
since childhood.
Secondly
, this method
also
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helps
them to choose
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subjects
for their higher studies.
Furthermore
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some
extra
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earlier in life is easier
rather
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age
. These
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can
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at a
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scale to young
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children
and complexity can
be increased
as they
are promoted
to higher grades.
For Example
, teaching computer basics and coding from an early
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age
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helps
pupils to excel this
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skill
easily
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In a nutshell, it is apt
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some
special
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subjects
after a certain
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age
is easy or
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children
to
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understand
.
However
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through whole school life,
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children
can achieve expertise in those
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skills
early.
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IELTS essay Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion?

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