Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some schools make all students wear uniforms, while other schools allow the students to choose what to wear. Which approach do you think is better for students' overall development? Why?

Some schools make all students wear uniforms, while other schools allow the students to choose what to wear. Which approach do you think is better for students' overall development? Why? 3YV5n
A number of people are of the opinion that schools’ main functions are to educate children and ready them for their future life. Accordingly, a segment of people advocates that there should be a dress code as a way to help children concentrate on their education. Others counter that giving them options and freedom on clothing prepares them for the future life where they will have to make their own choices. From my point of view, uniforms should be mandatory for freshman and junior years, but free to choose outfits for seniors. The main argument for mandating uniforms is that doing so would remove social pressures on students and would create an academic atmosphere rather than social competition. Thereby, students can differentiate themselves not by the labels on their clothes, but by the scores they achieve on tests. This argument is reinforced by studies demonstrating that institutions which are requiring uniforms experienced fewer incidents of bullying. An important factor is that selecting students by what they wear, characterizes them as vulnerable based on their outward appearance. On the other hand, schools would serve well their pupils by allowing them to dress as they pleased at least in their final year at school. This would provide seniors with a first-hand experience, face the consequences of their own choices and they will taste the reality of being adult and social. Moreover, this allowance would give a shape to their identity; for example, wearing fashionable or dressing to kill might help them to get into the company of those who dress well, but it definitely would not open the doors to a Wall Street lounge. In other words, youngsters must learn that free choice of clothing will not go unnoticed for their lifestyles. In conclusion, school life is a microcosm of adulthood, and teens ought to prepare for it by accumulating qualifications as well as an understanding that there will be consequences to their own choices. Requiring uniforms for two years, and allowing students to make up their own minds for one year may be the best option for both schools and students.
A number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are of the opinion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools’
main functions are to educate children and ready them for their future life.
Accordingly
, a segment of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
advocates that there should be a dress code as a way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
children concentrate on their education. Others counter that giving them options and freedom on clothing prepares them for the future life where they will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
. From my point of view,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
should be mandatory for freshman and junior years,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
free to choose outfits for seniors.

The main argument for mandating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
is that doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
would remove social pressures on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and would create an academic atmosphere
rather
than social competition. Thereby,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can differentiate themselves not by the labels on their clothes,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
by the scores they achieve on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tests
. This argument
is reinforced
by studies demonstrating that institutions which are requiring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
experienced fewer incidents of bullying. An
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor is that selecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
by what they wear, characterizes them as vulnerable based on their outward appearance.

On the other hand
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
would serve well their pupils by allowing them to dress as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
at least in their final
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. This would provide seniors with a
first
-hand experience, face the consequences of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
choices and
they will taste the reality of being adult and social.
Moreover
, this allowance would give a shape to their identity;
for example
, wearing fashionable or dressing to kill might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
of those who dress well,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it definitely would not open the doors to a Wall Street lounge.
In other words
, youngsters
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
learn that free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choice
of clothing will not go unnoticed for their lifestyles.

In conclusion
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
life is a microcosm of adulthood, and teens ought to prepare for it by accumulating qualifications
as well
as an understanding that there will be
The usual preposition to use after "consequences" is not "to". Did you mean "consequences of", "consequences for", or "consequences on"?
consequences to
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
. Requiring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniforms
for two years, and allowing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
up their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
minds for one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
may be the best option for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some schools make all students wear uniforms, while other schools allow the students to choose what to wear. Which approach do you think is better for students' overall development? Why?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Some schools make all students wear uniforms, while other schools allow the students to choose what to wear. Which approach do you think is better for students' overall development? Why?