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*some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time.Others say it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves in their own.Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

*some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time. Others say it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves in their own. 6VGW

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