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Some say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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People's view concerning where to derive maximum satisfaction about where to watch films are different. Some thought using phones or tablets is the best while others opined that it is fully enjoyed going to the theatre. In this essay, I shall discuss both these views and make my thoughts known on the matter. As a result of improved technology, some believed that the old ways to life should be completely eradicated. The use of gadgets such as phones are outcomes of technology which makes certain set of people to cherish being alone. Although, one can be bored watching film all alone using tablets. In addition to that, cost incurred for phone subscription is exorbitant compared to amount to be paid at the cinema. Change of environment can relieve one from stress and also open doors for several opportunities to meet with different calibre of people in the society. Moving outdoor can make an individual to unwind in order to eliminate stress of any type be it mental or emotional. For instance when I went to th the amphitheatre last week, I was opportuned to hook up with one of my old friends which led us to be business associates. To sum it up, there are individual differences with regards to where to view movies, therefore, it is appropriate for to choose.
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fully
enjoyed going to the
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theatre
. In this essay, I shall discuss both these views and
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make
my thoughts known on the matter.

As a result
of
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improved
technology,
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some
believed that the
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old
ways to life should be completely eradicated. The
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use
of gadgets such as phones are outcomes of technology which
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makes
certain set of
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people
to cherish being alone.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, one can
be bored
watching film all alone using tablets.
In addition
to that, cost incurred for phone subscription is exorbitant compared to amount to
be paid
at the cinema.

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Change
of environment can relieve one from
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stress
and
also
open doors for several opportunities to
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meet
with
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different
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calibre
of
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people
in the society. Moving outdoor can
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make
an individual to unwind in order to eliminate
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stress
of any type be it mental or emotional.
For instance
when I went to
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th
the
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amphitheatre
last week, I was
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opportuned
to hook up with one of my
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old
friends which led us to be business associates.

To sum it up, there are individual differences
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
where to view movies,
therefore
, it is appropriate for to choose.
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IELTS essay Some say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
221 words
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