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Some questions are really boring and a tough slog to write about but not this one! I think this topic is actually interesting and lends itself to some fun examples.

Some questions are really boring and a tough slog to write about but not this one! I think this topic is actually interesting and lends itself to some fun examples. E37ex
Music is considered the common language of the world, reglardless of age, race, or gender. While some think that certain kinds of music trigger hates, I agree with those who believe that music has the power to bring people together. It is known that people get along better if they can find common grounds, and music is definitely one such aspect. Scientists have shown that humans are born with the unique ability to recognize sound patterns, the primitives of music, and react physically. Hence, it is not suprising that all human races, ancient or modern, are found to have some forms of music in their cultures. It also explains why catchy songs have the ability to spread throughout borders at an amazing speed nowadays. In fact, besides sport tournaments, music festivals have become some of the most important events that people around the world look forward to. It is not uncommon nowadays to see people from different continents gather together to attend performances of artists they admire. While I concede that some people criticize genres they do not like in aggressive ways, in general, quality music is appriciated and celebrated. More importantly, it has been shown numerous times that musical events are effective in raising funds to solve world-wide problems, such as fatal diseases or catastrophic disasters. For example, renowned songs such as "We are the champions" and "Heal the world" have held people from different cultures and generations together to act for the greater good. To conclude, while agressive reactions to music are concerning, it is rare that people of different generations and colors have a common trait to share. Therefore, I believe music is a vital tool to bring people together.
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is considered
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reglardless
of age, race, or gender. While
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some
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think
that certain kinds of
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music
trigger hates, I
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agree
with those who believe that
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music
has the power to bring
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people
together.

It
is known
that
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people
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get
along better if they can find common grounds, and
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music
is definitely one such aspect. Scientists have shown that humans
are born
with the unique ability to recognize sound patterns, the primitives of
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music
, and react
physically
.
Hence
, it is not
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suprising
that all human races, ancient or modern,
are found
to have
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some
forms of
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music
in their cultures. It
also
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explains
why catchy songs have the ability to spread throughout borders at an amazing speed nowadays.

In fact,
besides
sport tournaments,
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music
festivals have become
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some
of the most
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important
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events
that
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people
around the world look forward to. It is not uncommon nowadays to
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see
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people
from
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different
continents gather together to attend performances of artists they admire. While I concede that
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some
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people
criticize genres they do not like in aggressive ways,
in general
, quality
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music
is
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appriciated
and celebrated. More
importantly
, it has
been shown
numerous times that musical
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events
are effective in raising funds to solve world-wide problems, such as fatal diseases or catastrophic disasters.
For example
, renowned songs such as
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We are the champions
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and
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Heal the world
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have held
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people
from
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different
cultures and generations together to act for the greater
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good
.

To conclude
, while
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agressive
reactions to
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music
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are concerning
, it is rare that
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people
of
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different
generations and colors have a common trait to share.
Therefore
, I believe
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music
is a vital tool to bring
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people
together.
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IELTS essay Some questions are really boring and a tough slog to write about but not this one! I think this topic is actually interesting and lends itself to some fun examples.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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