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Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. v. 1

Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. v. 1 MaKk
life as a teenager is the best. where some people think that people tend to be more happy in their teenage years and on the other hand you become more happy when you become an adult. Well as far as my opinion is concerned i believe that life as a teenager is less stressful and happy you do not have any responsibility your mind is not fully bound to the worldly burden. when you are a teenager your mind is still exploring the ideas, kind of people you meet you are still digesting the process and know how of the society you live your brain is busy making new ideas, exploring new games and places with your friends. although i have seen some teenagers working for a better life at a tender age and find happiness in their adult life people who think that adult life is more happy must have worked and maybe experienced the negative side of the world but my experience says as you enter in adulthood you have more responsibility on your shoulders to achieve the required goal or to be successful or have a burden of a big family you have more bills to pay resulting in having more expenditure and less savings however, some people think that life when you are in you teens is much enjoyable, stress free you have more energy and less diseases to deal with. for instance, teens usually have worries about their school work, grades, relationships rather than paying bills or to reach office early they are always protected by their parents or adults but as an adult you mostly have to take care of your self and be independent. so i think that life as a teenager is more happier than life as an adult.
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teenager
is the best.
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where
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happy
in their teenage years and
on the other hand
you become more
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happy
when you become an adult. Well as far as my opinion
is concerned
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i
believe that
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life
as a
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teenager
is less stressful and
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happy
you do not have any responsibility your mind is not
fully
bound to the worldly burden.
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when
you are a
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teenager
your mind is
still
exploring the
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ideas
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people
you
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meet
you are
still
digesting the process and know how of the society you
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live
your brain is busy making new
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ideas
, exploring new games and places with your friends.
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although
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have
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some
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teenagers
working for a better
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life
at a tender age and find happiness in their adult
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life
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people
who
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think
that adult
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life
is more
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happy
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must
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negative
side of the world
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but
my experience says as you enter in adulthood you have more responsibility on your shoulders to achieve the required goal or to be successful or have a burden of a
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big
family you have more bills to pay resulting in having more expenditure and
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savings
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,
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people
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when you are in you teens is much enjoyable,
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stress
free you have more energy and
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diseases to deal with.
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for
instance, teens
usually
have worries about their school work, grades, relationships
rather
than paying bills or to reach office early they are always protected by their parents or
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adults
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but
as an adult you
mostly
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have to
take care of your self and be independent.
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so
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i
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think
that
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life
as a
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teenager
is
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more happier
than
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life
as an adult.
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IELTS essay Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. v. 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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