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Some peple believe that it is waste of time on focusing future and it is better to focus on present.sate your opinion.

Some peple believe that it is waste of time on focusing future and it is better to focus on present. sate your opinion. PW0Oj
It is argued by numerous people that it is unnecessary to concentrate on future but should give importance to present. This essay disagree with the aforesaid notion. This essay discuss about the importance of future. Firstly, technology is changing day by day. In this contemporary era, technology is the main factor which rules the world, for which make life easy and the human with future technology is considered to be the king. Moreover, technology has become a part of our life and we can't survive without it. To illustrate, mobile phones have become a part of our body, for which we can't live without it. Secondly, every individuals are in thrist for adapting future technology. As the are changing continuously with the future makes them fittest people who can't adopt is filtered out. For exemplify, people who don't know to use internet find it elusive to compete in modern world. In contrast, future development has some side effects. It keeps people busy which reduce the attachment with the society. Moreover, future development keep seperate from society, coustoms, and cultures. For example, introduction of Facebook and Twitter reduce the involvement of social activities also communication between each other. In conclusion, while many people believe that we should focus on present not the future, we should focus on future not the present as future is going to replace the present. Focus on future may have some disadvantages but it overweight other things.
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is argued
by numerous
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people
that it is unnecessary to concentrate on
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future
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but
should give importance to
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present
.
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This essay disagree
with the aforesaid notion.
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This essay discuss
about the importance of future.

Firstly
,
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technology
is changing day by day. In this contemporary era,
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technology
is the main factor which
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rules
the world, for which
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make
life easy and the human with
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future
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technology
is considered
to be the king.
Moreover
,
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technology
has become a part of our
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life and
we can't survive without it. To illustrate, mobile phones have become a part of our body, for which we can't
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live
without it.

Secondly
, every
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individuals
are in
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thrist
for adapting
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future
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technology
.
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As
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the are
changing
continuously
with the
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future
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makes
them
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fittest
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people
who can't adopt
is filtered
out. For exemplify,
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people
who don't know to
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use
internet find it elusive to compete in modern world.

In contrast
,
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future
development has
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some
side effects. It
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keeps
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people
busy which
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reduce
the attachment with the society.
Moreover
,
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future
development
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keep
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seperate
from society,
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coustoms
, and cultures.
For example
, introduction of Facebook and Twitter
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reduce
the involvement of social activities
also
communication between each other.

In conclusion
, while
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many
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people
believe that we should focus on
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present
not the
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future
, we should focus on
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future
not the
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present
as
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future
is going to replace the
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present
. Focus on
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future
may have
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some
disadvantages
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but
it
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overweight
other things.
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IELTS essay Some peple believe that it is waste of time on focusing future and it is better to focus on present. sate your opinion.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
240 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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