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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It has been usually said that the best way to be successful in a job is to make career in it, so many people recommend to find a job where there is a possibility to be promoted, maintaining that the younger you find this work the better it will be. In the contrary, there are some people that does not agree with this view and that believe that it is also important to work for a vary of employers. It is my belief that the first argument is quite old-fashioned and that young people prefer to try working in different places before to decide to keep a job during a long period of their lives. Working in diverse companies and having different responsibilities can help to improve your professional skills and to have a better performance in the future, because there will be a huge variety of challenges that will be required from you to solve and that will leave you great lessons. Even though I think that it is important to try different jobs, I must agree that in order to make career as a professional it is usually better to keep working in the same place during at least a couple of years. It is easily to be promoted or to achieve a high position in an organization when they have seen you work during a considerable period since they know your most relevant characteristics and your personal featurings, such as responsibility and honesty. In conclusion, there is for me not right answer to this debate because it depends on too many factors, as it might be age, personal desires and different offices, so that I think that the best is to discover what for each person works better.
It has been
usually
said that the best way to be successful in a
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job
is to
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make
career in it,
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so
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many
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people
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recommend to find
a
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job
where there is a possibility to
be promoted
, maintaining that the younger you find this
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work
the
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better
it will be. In the contrary, there are
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some
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people
that does not
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agree
with this view and that believe that it is
also
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important
to
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work
for
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a vary
of employers.

It is my belief that the
first
argument is quite
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old
-fashioned and that young
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people
prefer to try working in
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different
places
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before
to decide to
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keep
a
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job
during a long period of their
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lives
. Working in diverse
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companies
and having
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different
responsibilities can
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help
to
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improve
your professional
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skills
and to have a
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better
performance in the future,
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because
there will be a huge variety of challenges that will
be required
from you to solve and that will
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leave
you great lessons.

Even though
I
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think
that it is
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important
to try
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different
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jobs
, I
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must
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agree
that in order to
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make
career as a professional it is
usually
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better
to
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keep
working in the same place during at least a couple of years. It is
easily
to
be promoted
or to achieve a high position in an organization when they have
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seen
you
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work
during a considerable period since they know your most relevant characteristics and your personal
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featurings
, such as responsibility and honesty.

In conclusion
, there is for me not right answer to this debate
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because
it depends on too
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many
factors, as it might be age, personal desires and
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different
offices,
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so
that I
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think
that the best is to discover what for each person works
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better
.
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IELTS essay Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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