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It has been usually said that the best way to be successful in a job is to make career in it, so many people recommend to find a job where there is a possibility to be promoted, maintaining that the younger you find this work the better it will be.

It has been usually said that the best way to be successful in a job is to make career in it, so many people recommend to find a job where there is a possibility to be promoted, maintaining that the younger you find this work the better it will be. In the contrary, there are some people that does not agree with this view and that believe that it is also important to work for a vary of employers. It is my belief that the first argument is quite old-fashioned and that young people prefer to try working in different places before to decide to keep a job during a long period of their lives. Working in diverse companies and having different responsibilities can help to improve your professional skills and to have a better performance in the future, because there will be a huge variety of challenges that will be required from you to solve and that will leave you great lessons.
It has been
usually
said that the best way to be successful in a job is to
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make
career in it,
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so
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many
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people
The verb ‘recommend’ is used with the gerund form: “recommend finding”.
recommend to find
a job where there is a possibility to
be promoted
, maintaining that the younger you find this work the better it will be. In the contrary, there are
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some
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people
that does not
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agree
with this view and that believe that it is
also
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important
to work for
After ‘a’, do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of ‘vary’ is correct. If ‘vary’ is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a vary
of employers.

It is my belief that the
first
argument is quite
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old
-fashioned and that young
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people
prefer to try working in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
places
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before
to decide to
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keep
a job during a long period of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. Working in diverse
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
responsibilities can
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help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
your professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and to have a better performance in the future,
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because
there will be a huge variety of challenges that will
be required
from you to solve and that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
you great lessons.

IELTS essay It has been usually said that the best way to be successful in a job is to make career in it, so many people recommend to find a job where there is a possibility to be promoted, maintaining that the younger you find this work the better it will be.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
163 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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