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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. v. 5
For most people, when they get their first job they have little idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation throughout their working life. If they decide to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall. People who stay with the same organisation have the advantage of thoroughly understanding how it works and also becoming familiar with the staff and process. If they work hard, their promotion prospects are good and there is likely to be greater job security, with the promise of a good pension when they retire. Employers value loyalty and may offer additional incentives to long-term employers, including bonuses and reward schemes. However, one of the drawbacks of staying with the same organisation is that the person may get stuck doing the same job year after year. In some cases, this can lead to boredom and disillusionment. Moving from organisation to another can be a strategic decision in order to have variety and acquire a range of skills and experience. A friend of my father started out as a sociology teacher, he then joined the Social Services and is currently managing a care home in Western Australia. This has made him incredibly knowledgeable in a range of related fields and, in my view, has provided him with a much more interesting working life. Although there are benefits to working for one organisation, I feel that it is also valuable for an employee to be able to offer a wide range of experience having worked for different companies. As long as it is planned carefully, I feel that change is good and will ultimately benefit the employee and the employer.
For most
people
, when they
get
their
first
job they have
little
idea
whether or not
they will remain in the same
organisation
throughout their working life. If they decide to
change
, they need to consider how this will impact on their career
overall
.

People
who stay with the same
organisation
have the advantage of
thoroughly
understanding how it works and
also
becoming familiar with the staff and process. If they work
hard
, their promotion prospects are
good
and there is likely to be greater job security, with the promise of a
good
pension when they retire. Employers value loyalty and may offer additional incentives to long-term employers, including bonuses and reward schemes.

However
, one of the drawbacks of staying with the same
organisation
is that the person may
get
stuck doing the same job year after year. In
some
cases, this can lead to boredom and disillusionment. Moving from
organisation
to another can be a strategic decision in order to have variety and acquire a range of
skills
and experience. A friend of my father
started
out as a sociology teacher, he then
joined
the Social Services and is
currently
managing a care home in Western Australia. This has made him
incredibly
knowledgeable in a range of related fields and, in my view, has provided him with a much more interesting working life.

Although there are benefits to working for one
organisation
, I feel that it is
also
valuable for an employee to be able to offer a wide range of experience having worked for
different
companies
. As long as it
is planned
carefully
, I feel that
change
is
good
and will
ultimately
benefit the employee and the employer.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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