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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss the both views and give your own opinion. v.11

Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss the both views and give your own opinion. v. 11
Nowadays, people suffering from lack of essential life requirements are increasing. However, Many believe that refugee reception by developed countries is the promising thing to do. Although it seems that it is their countries' responsibility, yet I believe it is a glob-level problem, and wealthy countries should help in solving it too. This topic will be discussed in the current essay. In poor countries, many people suffer from being insecure in terms of essential life requirements as they are called refugees, obviously because of civil wars. There is no doubt that food insecurity is one important reason why people in these countries need to be assessed, where quality control systems do not operate properly, hence dangerous food items reach the tables of the consumers. Moreover, many citizens lose their shelters along with security, in which they have been working their entire lives to obtain. Clearly, these-countries' governments are unable to perform real solutions, resulting in the majority of the citizens aim at migration to a better place in the world. In wealthy countries, each citizen lives in a secure community. Indeed, the government secures food, accommodation and security, with having a spare resources for future risks. However, such countries have the ability to assess refugees from poor countries for a better life. On the other hand, it can benefit from the educated ones as their specialities, while exploiting the less educated ones as labourers in different fields of work. In conclusion, the phenomena of the increasing numbers of refugees remains a heart-touching issue in the eyes of humankind all around the world, in which the whole global need to cooperate to achieve its disappearance all for the benefit of humans.
Nowadays,
people
suffering from lack of essential life requirements are increasing.
However
,
Many
believe that
refugee
reception by developed
countries
is the promising thing to do. Although it seems that it is their countries' responsibility,
yet
I believe it is a glob-level problem, and wealthy
countries
should
help
in solving it too. This topic will
be discussed
in the
current
essay.

In poor
countries
,
many
people
suffer from being insecure in terms of essential life requirements as they
are called
refugees
,
obviously
because
of civil wars. There is no doubt that food insecurity is one
important
reason why
people
in these
countries
need to
be assessed
, where quality control systems do not operate
properly
,
hence
dangerous
food items reach the tables of the consumers.
Moreover
,
many
citizens lose their shelters along with security, in which they have been working their entire
lives
to obtain.
Clearly
, these-countries'
governments
are unable to perform real solutions, resulting in the majority of the citizens aim at migration to a better place in the world.

In wealthy
countries
, each citizen
lives
in a secure community.
Indeed
, the
government
secures food, accommodation and security, with having a spare
resources
for future
risks
.
However
, such
countries
have the ability to assess
refugees
from poor
countries
for a better life.
On the other hand
, it can benefit from the educated
ones
as their specialities, while exploiting the less educated
ones
as
labourers
in
different
fields of work.

In conclusion
, the phenomena of the increasing numbers of
refugees
remains a heart-touching issue in the eyes of humankind all around the world, in which the whole global need to cooperate to achieve its disappearance all for the benefit of humans.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss the both views and give your own opinion. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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