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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. v. 6
It is undeniable that adolescence can be a critical period for both youngsters and their parents. Although some people believe that it does more harm than good, I would argue that it is an essential stage of teenagers’ development. On the one hand, those who believe that teenage conflict is harmful might argue that it can damage relationships between parents and their children. This is because such disputes can create tensions in the family. In other words, it is quite common for young people to begin smoking at their age to impress their peers, however, this would be resulted in confrontations with parents can lead to a complicated communication. In contrast, if there is no conflict between children and their parents, there will be a healthier communication among family members. On the other hand, my view is that this conflict is important because it can help teenagers to mature. The reason behind this is that an assistance can be provided to these teenagers to make their own decisions rightly. For instance, a child may grow in a family of meat-eaters but feel strongly against meat. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against their principles. However, if they are willing to be engaged in a conflict with their parents, their opinion will be much clearer. To conclude, despite the danger of damaging relationships with teenage conflict can create, it is my view that this time of friction is a vital step to teenagers becoming mature and independently-minded adults.
It is undeniable that adolescence can be a critical period for both youngsters and their
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parents
. Although
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some
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people
believe that it does more harm than
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good
, I would argue that it is an essential stage of
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teenagers’
development.

On the one hand, those who believe that teenage
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conflict
is harmful might argue that it can damage relationships between
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parents
and their children. This is
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because
such disputes can create tensions in the family.
In other words
, it is quite common for young
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people
to
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begin
smoking at their age to impress their peers,
however
, this would
be resulted
in confrontations with
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parents
can lead to a complicated communication.
In contrast
, if there is no
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conflict
between children and their
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parents
, there will be a healthier communication among family members.

On the other hand
, my view is that this
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conflict
is
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important
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because
it can
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help
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teenagers
to mature. The reason behind this is that an assistance can
be provided
to these
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teenagers
to
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make
their
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own
decisions
rightly
.
For instance
, a child may grow in a family of meat-eaters
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but
feel
strongly
against meat. If this child does not voice their opinion, they will be going against their principles.
However
, if they are willing to
be engaged
in a
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conflict
with their
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parents
, their opinion will be much clearer.

To conclude
, despite the
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danger
of damaging relationships with teenage
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conflict
can create, it is my view that this time of friction is a vital step to
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teenagers
becoming mature and
independently
-minded adults.
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IELTS essay Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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