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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. v.8

The topic of arguments that may burst out between older and younger members of one particular family has been commonly discussed in modern society. As usual, the society has divided into two sides: one side agrees that confrontations are the essential process of relationship between relatives, others deny the fact that conflicts have a place to be in a healthy and content family. This essay will look at both points of view, and it will present my own opinion about this theme in conclusion. To begin with, the instability of children psychological health is a generally known fact. It means that the immature child nervous system must be correspondingly defended from emotional insults from the parent`s side as this factor may cause diseases based on stress. Referring to international research in a field of the emotional health of children might be a perfect example. It claims that the main reason for juvenile suicides is usually bad relationships with parents. This astonishing research fully supports the previously presented view of a discussion about conflicts in a family. On the other hand, children are expected to be prepared for adult life. In order to that, the character of youngsters might be tempered through arguments with older members of a family. From my own experience, I have argued with my dad once. We were exchanging views on my future profession, and although he was trying to convince me in what he was sure about, I have defended my position. Summing up, the topic given for my essay is quite interesting and important to discuss. While some believe that arguments should be avoided, others support the idea of spirit tempering. And my view is clear – children should live in a quiet and peaceful environment at home, so that their nervous system may develop successfully.
The topic of arguments that may burst out between older and younger members of one particular family has been
commonly
discussed in modern society. As usual, the society has divided into two sides: one side
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agrees
that confrontations are the essential process of relationship between relatives, others deny the fact that conflicts have a place to be in a healthy and content family. This essay will look at both points of
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view
, and it will present my
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own
opinion about this theme
in conclusion
.

To
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begin
with, the instability of
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children
psychological health is a
generally
known fact. It means that the immature child nervous system
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must
be
correspondingly
defended from emotional insults from the
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side as this factor may cause diseases based on
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stress
. Referring to international research in a field of the emotional health of
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children
might be a perfect example. It claims that the main reason for juvenile suicides is
usually
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bad
relationships with parents. This astonishing research
fully
supports the previously presented
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view
of a discussion about conflicts in a family.

On the other hand
,
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children
are
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expected
to
be prepared
for adult life. In order to that, the character of youngsters might
be tempered
through arguments with older members of a family. From my
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own
experience, I have argued with my dad once. We were exchanging
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views
on my future profession, and although he was trying to convince me in what he was sure about, I have defended my position.

Summing up, the topic
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for my essay is quite interesting and
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important
to discuss. While
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believe that arguments should
be avoided
, others support the
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idea
of spirit tempering. And my
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view
is
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clear
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–
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children
should
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live
in a quiet and peaceful environment at home,
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so
that their nervous system may develop
successfully
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IELTS essay Some people view conflict between teenagers and parents as a necessary part of growing up, while others view it as something negative which should be avoided.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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