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some people think watching TV is bad for children, while others think that watching TV has a more beneficial effect on children. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

children nowadays are watching TV more than any other sources of like laptops, mobile phones, and computers. They are more satisfied with TV. However, I believe that watching TV is not bad for children if they watch it in their leisure time. Regardless, watching TV constantly is not precise. Some people also believe that it is worthwhile and good. I will discuss both views. I believe that continuous children watching TV are disastrous. It can damage children's eyes and that cause extremely terrible outcomes. Furthermore, children love to watch cartoons and TV shows more. This makes children satisfied but also weak. For instance, a 6-year-old boy watching TV the whole day and this resulted in damage to his eyes and now he has to wear spectacle regularly. He can't even look properly without spectacles. I believe that children should watch TV in their leisure time. Television consists of so many channels that we can't visualize. Watching educational programs and series can help children to get basic general knowledge. It is beneficial for both children and adults. People believe that watching the news and live matches are good for children. For example, I'm watching TV regularly and I find it so interesting. This has helped me with general information about the economy and many other things. Children also receive so many benefits from TV if they watch for a good purpose. To conclude, I feel that TV is good for children if they watch it for a reason and periodically. Watching it frequently a day is bad. But at the same point, it is useful and disastrous.
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nowadays are watching TV more than any other sources of like laptops, mobile phones, and computers. They are more satisfied with TV.
However
, I
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believe
that watching TV is not
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bad
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children
if they
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watch
it in their leisure time. Regardless, watching TV
constantly
is not precise.
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Some
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people
also
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believe
that it is worthwhile and
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good
. I will discuss both views.

I
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believe
that continuous
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children
watching TV are disastrous. It can damage children's eyes and that cause
extremely
terrible outcomes.
Furthermore
,
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children
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love
to
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watch
cartoons and TV
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shows
more. This
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makes
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children
satisfied
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but
also
weak.
For instance
, a 6-year-
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old
boy watching TV the whole day and this resulted in damage to his eyes and
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now
he
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has to
wear spectacle
regularly
. He can't even look
properly
without spectacles. I
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believe
that
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children
should
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watch
TV in their leisure time.

Television consists of
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so
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many
channels that we can't visualize. Watching educational programs and series can
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help
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children
to
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get
basic general knowledge. It is beneficial for both
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children
and adults.
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People
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believe
that watching the news and
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live
matches are
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good
for
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children
.
For example
, I'm watching TV
regularly
and I find it
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so
interesting. This has
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helped
me with general information about the economy and
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many
other things.
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Children
also
receive
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so
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many
benefits from TV if they
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watch
for a
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good
purpose.

To conclude
, I feel that TV is
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good
for
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children
if they
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watch
it for a reason and
periodically
. Watching it
frequently
a day is
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bad
.
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But
at the same point, it is useful and disastrous.
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IELTS essay some people think watching TV is bad for children, while others think that watching TV has a more beneficial effect on children.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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