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Some people think they have done all they should do to society by paying taxes, but other people think people should take more responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think they have done all they should do to society by paying taxes, but other people think people should take more responsibilities. KlxEw
Different people have different ideas about whether we, as average citizens, should hold more accountabilities besides paying taxes or not. In my opinion, there are still many responsibilities that can be taken by residents. The advocates against taking more responsibilities think that problems faced by society are so significant that individual citizen, as a member of thousands of millions of people in whole society, actually can do a very limited number of things. The existing issues ranging from the environmental pollution, the uneven distribution of resources to traffic congestion cannot be eliminated by a certain group of people, let alone a common citizen. In addition, the taxes we paid to the country can be allocated to a variety of fields, mitigating problems in distinct industries. For example, the taxes we levied can be utilized to financially support some educational programmes which aim to train teachers from disadvantaged backgrounds. However, although we cannot directly contribute to tackling social problems, there are still many small things that we can do to help government improve the society as a whole, as long as we change//调整 our habits or raise awareness of contributing to society. Firstly, if we can change some of our working or daily habits, we can still make a significant contribution to the development of our society. For example, the transformation from driving private cars to taking public transport, like public buses or subway, can not only decline the level of air pollution, but also alleviate the traffic jam, further decreasing traffic accidents. In addition, we are still able to contribute positively to a society by raising the environmental awareness. It is often the case that we are exposed to multiple information on the television about how serious damage can be caused to our soil if too much chemical fertilizers are employed in the agricultural process, or the potential disasters brought by the global climate warming. If we, especially farmers, can replace the use of chemicals with new technological methods, or if we develop the habits of taking public transportation when traveling outside, the contributions we make are so enormous that cannot be neglected. In conclusion, i still believe that common citizens should take more responsibilities except paying taxes.
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ideas
about whether we, as average
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citizens
, should hold more
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accountabilities
besides
paying
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taxes
or not. In my opinion, there are
still
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many
responsibilities that can
be taken
by residents.

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think
that problems faced by
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society
are
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so
significant that individual
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citizen
, as a member of thousands of millions of
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people
in whole
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society
, actually can do a
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very
limited number of things. The existing issues ranging from the environmental pollution, the uneven distribution of resources to traffic congestion cannot
be eliminated
by a certain group of
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people
,
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let
alone a common
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citizen
.
In addition
, the
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taxes
we paid to the country can
be allocated
to a variety of fields, mitigating problems in distinct industries.
For example
, the
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taxes
we levied can
be utilized
to
financially
support
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some
educational
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programmes
which aim to train teachers from disadvantaged backgrounds.
However
, although we cannot
directly
contribute to tackling social problems, there are
still
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many
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small
things that we can do to
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help
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government
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improve
the
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society
as a whole, as long as we
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change
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调整
our habits or raise awareness of contributing to society.

Firstly
, if we can
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change
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some
of our working or daily habits, we can
still
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make
a significant contribution to the development of our
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society
.
For example
, the transformation from driving private cars to taking public transport, like public buses or subway, can not
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only
decline the level of air pollution,
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but
also
alleviate the traffic jam,
further
decreasing traffic accidents.
In addition
, we are
still
able to contribute
positively
to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
by raising the environmental awareness. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
the case that we
are exposed
to multiple information on the television about how serious damage can
be caused
to our soil if too much chemical fertilizers
are employed
in the agricultural process, or the potential disasters brought by the global climate warming. If we,
especially
farmers, can replace the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of chemicals with new technological methods, or if we develop the habits of taking public transportation when traveling outside, the contributions we
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make
are
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so
enormous that cannot
be neglected
.

In conclusion
,
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i
still
believe that common
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citizens
should take more responsibilities except paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
.
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IELTS essay Some people think they have done all they should do to society by paying taxes, but other people think people should take more responsibilities.

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