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Some people think the news has no connection to People's life, so then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by some that news has nothing to do with people's day-to-day life and thus it is pointless to spend time reading News or watching news channel. I believe that rather than a waste of time, there is actually a lot of Gain by watching news on the TV and reading newspaper. There are many reasons why people should keep themselves up to date with the news event. Firstly, news is the main source of information about the government policies which directly impact people's life. In other words, people can be better prepared to deal with the changes in life, if they read newspaper. For example comment traffic fines were increased, many people were caught unaware and had to use find the full stop does common use makes people better inform citizen. Secondly, news is a source of inspiration. When people hear or read about others misfortune and how they overcome them, they learn to be resilient. Not only that, when they learn about others adversity, they learn to appreciate what they have in life and it encourage them to help and support others. Inspiration can also come in the form of innovative ideas about business. When people hear about others success stories they are motivated to work hard and challenge their limits. Thirdly, in this era of many truths, newspaper are the only thing that can help us differentiate the actual truth from many rumours. By watching credible and objective news, people can learn how to distinguish fact from fiction, which in turn develops people's critical thinking ability as well. Finally it would be wrong to not consider the role of news in enhancing peoples language and vocabulary skillful. To summarise, listening to the news or reading the paper daily is very important to be a part of global village of today.
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thus
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channel. I believe that
rather
than a waste of time, there is actually
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a lot of
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on the TV and reading newspaper.

There are
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many
reasons why
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people
should
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keep
themselves up to date with the
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news
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event
.
Firstly
,
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news
is the main source of information about the
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government
policies which
directly
impact
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people
's
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life
. In
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other
words,
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people
can be better prepared to deal with the
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changes
in
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life
, if they read newspaper.
For example
comment traffic fines
were increased
,
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many
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people
were caught
unaware and had to
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use
find the full
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makes
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people
better inform citizen.

Secondly
,
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news
is a source of inspiration. When
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people
hear or read about others misfortune and how they overcome them, they
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learn
to be resilient. Not
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only
that, when they
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learn
about others adversity, they
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learn
to appreciate what they have in
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life and
it
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encourage
them to
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help
and support others. Inspiration can
also
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come
in the form of innovative
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ideas
about business. When
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people
hear about others success stories they
are motivated
to work
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hard
and challenge their limits.

Thirdly
, in this era of
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many
truths, newspaper are the
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only
thing that can
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help
us differentiate the actual truth from
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many
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rumours
. By watching credible and objective
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news
,
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people
can
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learn
how to distinguish fact from fiction, which in turn develops
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people
's critical thinking ability
as well
.
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Finally
it would be
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wrong
to not consider the role of
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news
in enhancing
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peoples
language and vocabulary skillful.

To
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summarise
, listening to the
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news
or reading the paper daily is
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very
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important
to be a part of global village of
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today
.
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IELTS essay Some people think the news has no connection to People's life, so then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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