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Some people think the most important skill nurses should have is having good medical knowledge. Others believe there are other more important qualities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A good number of people believe that having a fair understanding of medicines is the most significant skill for the nurses. However, I would argue that there are many other essential skills a health care worker must demonstrate. For an attendant, it is vital to know about medicines, without which a caregiver might be less equipped while taking an instant decision in case of an emergency. For example, in case of a pandemic when most of the healthcare workers and doctors are busy, a good medical knowledge would benefit a nurse while attending a patient. Furthermore, having understanding of medicines might lead to saving lives of many. To illustrate, during the Covid-19 outbreak, when most of the hospital were full and the doctors were extremely busy, a lot of healthcare workers were educated to treat the sick with basic medication. However, I think a job as caregiver is far more important, and a nurse must demonstrate empathy. If a nurse is not compassionate enough, she/he would never comprehend what a patient is going through. As a result, the caregiver would be unable to attend the sick properly. There are many examples in medical science where it is proven that with love and a proper care a person can come back from his/her death-bed. Moreover, it’s a nurse who spends the most of the time with the patient, and being kind can heal a person faster as he/she is in a happy environment. In conclusion, while a good understanding of medicines is an important skill for a nurse, I believe that the most significant ability a caregiver must demonstrate is compassion.
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caregiver
might be less equipped while taking an instant decision in case of an emergency.
For example
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medical knowledge would benefit a
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nurse
while attending a patient.
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. To illustrate, during the Covid-19 outbreak, when most of the hospital were full and the doctors were
extremely
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healthcare workers
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to treat the sick with basic medication.

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demonstrate empathy. If a
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, she/he would never comprehend what a patient is going through.
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would be unable to attend the sick
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. There are
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many
examples in medical science where it
is proven
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love
and a proper care a person can
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come
back from his/her death-bed.
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, it’s a
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nurse
who spends the most of the time with the patient, and being kind can heal a person faster as he/she is in a happy environment.

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, while a
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understanding of medicines is an
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skill
for a
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nurse
, I believe that the most significant ability a
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caregiver
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must
demonstrate is compassion.
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IELTS essay Some people think the most important skill nurses should have is having good medical knowledge. Others believe there are other more important qualities.

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4 paragraphs
270 words
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